Introduction to Misconception

Cas is 15 year old girl who has all the right friends, but in all the wrong places.  Growing up in a broken home. Her mum and father were never married, only in a six week relationship, but lived together until Cas was 8 and a half.  From then on, Cas lived with her father, Alan, and stepmother, Clarissa.  Elementary school was a mess for Cas, and middle school was just hell.  Now she’s starting high school, and she doesn’t know what the hell to expect.  In 7th grade, Cas became involved in some things that were not so great. Experimenting with low-dosage prescription pills, alcohol, and every now and then the occasional pot brownie or cookie.  

“ ……..Did I mention that I’m emo?  No, I don’t cut for attention.  It’s my escape, my release.  Yeah, sure, I need to find a different release,  and trust me, I’ve tried.  But I always come back to the small blade, that causes such a sweet sting when dragged across my skin.  I’m a monster you say?  Yes, I agree with you.  And I haven’t been able to find a way out of this sick cycle………….”

Cas continues to struggle through her freshman year.  But remember, in  order to keep history from repeating itself, you must start with reviewing and remembering the past.  Cas has been doing this.  But is she stuck in the past?  Or is she just not willing to face what is in front of her?

Reviews

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

Introspection fosters misconceptions. When we look within, the details in our memory become secondary to our emotional state. We may fixate on feelings and rearrange facts to support those feelings. We reinforce that which we perceive as important and necessary rather than that which best aids our future. Introspection works best when viewed as the observer, instead of the feeler. The careful observant, sees all the details without the the dramatic connection of self. In this frame of mind, as the observer, we also are able to see our adversaries foibles and weaknesses. We grant others too much power, over our emotions. Rise above the opponent's petty indulgences. See them for what they are, bullies. No need to fight or fear. Simply pity them and wish them well. They have no personal power. That is why they want to steal yours. Rise above. Leave them to roil in their own pit.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good introduction. You gave the character some history and described her struggle. Thank you dear poet for sharing the excellent introduction.
Coyote

[barleygirl]

I'm not clear on one thing -- is the speaker (paragraph of dialogue, second to end): emo = Cas?

Frankly, I would use this as the opening paragraph. I like it when a chapter opens up in the midst of the story or action, rather than starting with an explanation that drones on. Explanation does not deliver the intrigue that an opening needs to have. Better to immerse your reader right into the story, right away. I like the outline of your story here, it all makes sense as explained, but the opening to any story needs to snag your reader & compel him/her want to dive in. (((HUGS))) fondly, Margie

[jaywolf1738]

I really want to know what happens next to Cas. Very good introduction. I can sort of relate. I hope to read more of Cas soon.

[Toxic]

The last paragraph was really amazing.

[Cherrie]

You have all the elements for a great story but to many facts strung together. Breakup some of the details with items that give a since of feeling. Use at least 2 of your sences. Make the reader feel your story.

[Emma]

Sounds like you have a plan for a pretty great story here. Love Cas' dialogue, she seems feisty and strong-minded and I'm intrigued by what she is trying to avoid, and the questions of why people turn to drugs/alcohol is always very powerful, especially like the fact you are not just going with one factor contributing to it.