Mirror

I don’t really know

Where I need to go.

And I don’t really care.

I know that life isn’t always fair,

So what we all need to do,

Is live in the moment,

While it can last.

It’s been years since I first put it on,

but I think I’m finally ready to take off

This Dirty, Old, and Hard cast.

All I know for sure,

is that I am here.

Right now.

I am here, and I am here right now.

Even though you have been gone for some time,

And your still not here,

I’m alright with that.

If I ever want to see you,

All I have to do, is look in the

Mirror.

I see you in my eyes,

Your Blue, mixing with my Green,

To make a Sea.

I see you in my hair.

Your unruly and wild curls,

Are slowly over taking my box*-brown hair.

I see you, when I look over myself,

Your beauty, passed onto me.

I have your curves and  your looks.

You’re closer to me than I thought.

You never left,

Only hidden,

By my own pain.

Not until I discarded my mask,

Did I gain my knowledge.

Reviews

[Some Kind of Poet]

I agree with the others, very relatable. I also agree with barleygirl in that some parts could have been trimmed down a tad as the middle gets a little difficult to read it fluently.

However, the imagination it gave me, and some of the memories it took me back to.. thank you for sharing, and I look forward to reading the rest.

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard to do, but we must.
"ot until I discarded my mask,
Did I gain my knowledge."
Fake face and hiding real thoughts leave us alone. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Geodan]

Great poem. Beautifully written and relatable.

[Re-Pete]

very telling & revealing. sometimes we are blinded to what is really right in front of us. i like the ending conclusion. nice job.

[barleygirl]

The first 7 lines of your poem are relatable & well-written, but this is flat reading, compared to the rest. It starts out with the narrator seemingly arguing with herself about general concepts, stuff that doesn't matter, it doesn't spark ideas & feelings in the reader's mind.

Then when your main message finally kicks in, it's awesome. I love the specifics, the comparisons, & the bittersweet tone. Some writers take a little time to warm up to what they are trying to say by blathering for a bit. I prefer when a piece starts out with an intense & compelling statement -- "all I have to do is look in the mirror!" I wouldn't expect you to change this, but just keep it in mind for future writing (((HUGS))) fondly, Margie

[lessa (kenzie)]

This is really good, my favorite of yours. nicely presented and written.

[R.E. Ray]

This is my new favorite poem from you. I sense it's written from direct personal experience (perhaps loss of a mother, father or grandparent). It's incredible how those experiences can enhance our writing. It's not only a touching tribute, it's a poetic expression of gratitude. Nice work.

[jaywolf1738]

Beautiful poem emocat. I can relate except different eye color and curlier hair lol