The Lullaby of Death

This is what happens when people cut.

 The Lullaby of Death

 

Pounding on the door,

And screams in the distance.

There she is, lying on the floor.

People thought she was so persistent,

 

But how can she repeat this?

The cuts on her wrists?

You think she can; Tis-Tis!

It makes people so pissed.

 

This lullaby I sing

Is so real

That you can almost her the ting

The  Bell of Death reveals.

Author's Note

Anything would be great! Thanks!

Reviews

[He@ther!]

Wow!!! A very bold and powerful piece indeed! Excellent imagry and I love the sort of lingering effect the last stanza has:)

[MarchAprilMayJuneJuly]

this was short but sweet!!! i can totally relate to this, and it's cool how you've been there and you understand...people never actually know just how bas someone's life is, and so they assume things and say stuff that hurts and can't go away... i would like you to have written more, but i think you got out what you were trying to say with out making it long...

nice!!

~may

[PENS FOR PEACE /TJ CALI..]

A very powerful truthful poem!
I feel the pain and suffering in it!
All of us, will sooner or later stand at death's door.
Sad to say some of us will stand there more then once in our lives (as you will see in my writings!)
Thank you for such a great poem!
Good luck in all your future writings.
Just keep writing from your soul for your soul!
TIM

[Tina Kline]

A very powerful poem. And I know the subject matter very well if I get the meaning
of the poem correctly. I like the way you wrote it, you did it in a very powerful way.
And the poem is very well written and compelling. You caught my attention right away
and I read with interest. Like the way you wrote on the subject matter.

Tina

[Karissa.]

Very powerful and such a good story behind this. Keep it up =)
~Karissa

[Michael Kerr]

wow i like it. did you just write this or did you write this awhile ago? for what its worth i think its good.
keep writing
-mike-