This poem of yours speaks loudly to all of us. At some level, we've all been wrrong. But it takes a mature person to admit wrong, express regret and resolve to amend their life. Nice job.
I especially like the line: "If you show me what's right, I won't make this mistake again." So often people are willing to point out someone else's wrong doing but not show them what's right. This is great writing.
Also, I like the line: "This is how we prove, It was just another love story." It is important that love be part of the formula for confession, acceptance and forgiveness. Without love, it's all pretense. I love your sensitivity of purpose.
Was short and delivered a punch. The flow was good, the ending had a slight twist to it which was much appreciated ..Love is one fucked up game but it's one i'd try and participate in even though I might be destined to fail. Great write.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
It's something many people wish to experience but in the end they realize it doesn't make a differen.. read moreIt's something many people wish to experience but in the end they realize it doesn't make a difference. Thank you.
This poem of yours speaks loudly to all of us. At some level, we've all been wrrong. But it takes a mature person to admit wrong, express regret and resolve to amend their life. Nice job.
I especially like the line: "If you show me what's right, I won't make this mistake again." So often people are willing to point out someone else's wrong doing but not show them what's right. This is great writing.
Also, I like the line: "This is how we prove, It was just another love story." It is important that love be part of the formula for confession, acceptance and forgiveness. Without love, it's all pretense. I love your sensitivity of purpose.
I felt suicidal at a stage of life and so was my wife before we met. What changed everything was the love we found. As the saying goes permanent solution to a temporary problem.
How often do we feel like this and how often are we made to feel like this when the blame is not all ours. This is wonderful, Keep writing you've a wonderful talent.
The best things to do with mistakes is learn from them. :) Amazing poem, full of power.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
that's why I now say don't regret anything because it made you happy once and it was your choice, le.. read morethat's why I now say don't regret anything because it made you happy once and it was your choice, learning from your mistakes makes who are today, thank you for the review.
I don't post as much as I used to, I'll trash most of the songs I write because I always compare them to my favorite bands' music and it just never seems good enough. I don't think my poems and stori.. more..