WHO DO I BLAME?

When you refuse to look inward for the answer

Irrepressible and unquenchable

thirst to seek out the red hands,

which choke me in their grasp,

crushing me and forcing me to gasp:

beg to breathe.

 

My veins pulse erratically and

my eyelids droop submissively then

shoot open with false conviction.

The accelerating beating announces

the arrival of others.

 

Warning blurs to mockery

as red seeps into broken memories.

They grow and gather,

prepare for another wave.

Pride in their collective, shimmering beauty.

 

It hits me.

 

Momentarily I am stunned.

Everything stops.

I am content in my understanding.

But the beating resumes,

intensified by the brief pause.

 

Beating. Glimpse. Red.

 

Beat. See. Red.

 

Red. Hit. Calm.

 

Beat. Red. Hit. Beat.

Red. Hit.

Beat.

Red.

Hit.

Red.

Red.

Red.

 

Beaten.

 

All I see and all I will ever see

is red.

 

I look through pupils framed

with red.

 

Powered by blood which stains

red.

 

I am consumed by a desire to find

what never existed. 

Author's Note

I'm not sure if the imagery is too unclear; if I focused too much on the concept of being red handed and red herrings.

Reviews

[Deep]

Wow...amazingly braided. You write extraordinarily, the way you altered the color of words, shows the skill as a poet. Intensity, emotion, rhythm, dictum all are on a different level.

I am consumed by a desire to find
what never existed.
Exceptionally written!!

[Emma]

Thankyou I'm not sure about poetic skill but I did enjoy writing this one definitely intense

[Deep]

Keep writing, it is delight to read your poems!

[Suhd]

Very unusual and bold style of writing a poem this is filled with some really strong emotion. Loved it.

[Emma]

Thank you for your kind comment, definitely one of my strangest poems but whatever is in my head at the time is what I write

[BlackPrince]

Well, this poem certainly has a unique flow and style. The rhythm is measured with a smooth flow.
I love RED as my favourite colour (Iam just crazy about the colour RED), and so 'red' in your poem stood out for me.

WELL DONE

[Emma]

Thank you I'm glad you enjoyed it

[lessa (kenzie)]

Love this write, loved the usage of the Red ink in it, makes it stand out. Nicely written and love the imagery

[Emma]

Thank you very much and thanks for commenting

[therealtadkent]

Love your use of color and the unorthodox stanzas. Your structure itself is art. Your mind seems complex and untamed, and it shows in your piece. Lovely.

[Emma]

Thankyou very much. I actually wrote it all out as one long stanza at first as the ideas came, and then I saw afterwards the clear changes in focus and the one sentence stanzas at the end just felt right.

[therealtadkent]

Well you did it tastefully, and it even looks lovely aesthetically. it would look great on a page, and it read beautifully as well.