Heartbroken...

"For a few minutes you made me feel as though I actually meant something to someone."

Tears spread like the cracks...

The cracks that spread through my heart...

That were there in the beginning...

You remember? The ones you mended...

Those cracks, breaking and bursting at the seems...

Bursting to the surface, spreading into lines of red...

This time your hands do not mend...

Your hands break everything that was left of me...

Breathing left heavy...

Eyes burning red...

Like the blood lining my skin...

How can you not know the pain you cause...

How if you ever read this, you would be so shocked...

You have no idea what you do to me...

How you can leave me feeling dead inside, but so happy on the outside...

I guess its true what they told me...

What I knew all along...

Giving your heart away can only bring you pain...

My trust in you has left me heartbroken...

Author's Note

~Awarded "Most Relatable" in the Life Sucks Contest~

Reviews

[Winslow Des Totes]

That's the problem it seems, to give one's heart to another means to live without it, or be destroyed. Very vivid imagery and emotional diction made a very thoughtful write! Great job! I hope the scars of love don't scare you from it's tenderness, only time can heal the wounds so deep seeded in our hearts that only our eyes can tell of it's existence and our lips tremble at it's remembrance. :) Keep up the good work!

[Kaa Na Kalyanasundaram]

I liked. It has rhyming and beautiful structure of lines and expressions. With regards.

How can you not know the pain you cause...

..............a good line!

[khalid]

although it is a really sad poem, with much feelings of sorrow, sadness, depression and disappointment, you have read it in a very nice way. i liked the images, the words picking and the flow in addition to the nice rhyming and the wonderful shape...great work..

[Kyle]

This is sad....yet well written.....

I like how this is arranged.

[ChervenkovaM]

Great work and I can totally releate to that. It has so much truth in it. This is very well written and again it reflects pain that many people feel. You turn emotions into words and have the reader glued to his seat until he reads everything. You've got a tallent :)

[fireblossom]

This is a straightforward poem. It tells the story well. Telling the human condition clearly is one of the privileges of we poets. Good job.

[Luciole]

This is a great poem. I've felt the same way a few times in my life so I definitely felt for the subject of this poem. It felt like you had written about me, from my point of view, so you did an amazing job at making connect to the reader. I'm soooo putting this in my library :)

[Rik B]

the heart!, great words I felt bad, and wanted to give you a new heart. I too dont like poems that are centered on a page, but it can stress certain parts of the poem if you do it right... great job.

[Tai Ryens]

Amazing words spoken by a true poet! I empathized with every word of this very poem, and I felt the pain you embedded into your metaphor with imagery. Keep up the amazing work!

[Steven Westbrook]

To make it easier to read I'd recommend left margining this poem. If you want me to be completely honest I sort of feel a since of clicheness from your piece seeing that most poems are of heartbreak. otherwise your imagery is spot-on and is highly emotional

[Distant horizons]

Sad, sorrowful words, beautifully penned.