It Was As If

It was as if....I felt different, someone else

It was as if my mind was playing tricks on me, swallowed up by a demon's breath

Possessed by a creature that others could see but only I could feel, for I was blinded by the creature's blazing light encircling it

A creature that twisted my stomach into knots, pulled every ounce of decision out from my mind

It was as if I was inhaling a poison that pumped through my bloodstream and exhaling the residue leftover upon the people I love

Author's Note

A poem for a contest

Reviews

[Jake Brunton]

Just happened to randomly stumble upon this. I'm not too great at giving constructive feedback, but I just wanted to share my opinion; I think the wording in this and the image it plays through my mind is really, well, epic and somewhat powerful; I love stuff like that. Good job.

[Emily]

Thank you very much for your review. I greatly appreciate your thoughts.

[Bohrium Guy]

I really like this line "It was as if my mind was playing tricks on me, swallowed up by a demon's breath" the whole poem had excellent imagery. Thanks for sharing.

~Rob~

[Emily]

Thanks for you thoughts (:

[Bohrium Guy]

Your welcome anytime.

[Justin]

that was really great, u were able to get your point across, in the way that u did :) :) great job :)

[Emily]

Thank you so much (:

[Justin]

your welcome, keep it up, it was a great poem :)

[M.E.Lyle]

Hmm, I don't know what to make of this. I assume, and I do assume too much, that you fell in love, were blinded by love, and couldn't see the real person behind the face of love. Okay, so I'm a little crazy...maybe a lot crazy.

[Emily]

Thanks for your review. It's interesting to see how you interpreted it....I wrote this poem shortly after a difficult time, for me, the poem has to do with mental illness.