The Mighty Do Fall

Sort of a fun story

Said the mighty moon to the stars,

"Look how small you all are!
I bring light to the world,
Time after time,
As you all struggle from afar".

"While I stand alone,
You serve me, and my throne;
No one cares much for a star".

The stars for years had served the moon
With not so much as a single outcry,
But one brave star,
With passion in his heart, yelled,
"Alone we may be small, but together we fill the sky!".

"Oh my what is this?" The mighty moon sneered.
"A tiny yell filled with pride? Please tell me more,
Shine bright, do not hide!"

The outspoken star
Had inspired a few more
To raise their voice
And speak their mind.

"You're as hard as stone".
"And as cold as ice".
"Changes in you bring troubled tides".

"You wax and you wane,
Diminishing with each phase".
"We bring life long after we die,
Shining still bright after our days".

"What hope we bring as we fall!".
Then the star who spoke first,
Perhaps said it best of all,

"One night you show full,
But that should not bring you such pride,
There's also one night,
You struggle to shine at all".

The stars then all began to sing
Together, a night-sky harmony.
The man in the moon then began to weep,
Thew himself at their feet,

His throne fallen, and gone.

Then in his utter defeat,
He slunk off in retreat,
To give way to the morning Sun.

Reviews

[DCT ponderings]

It beckoned the power of individual voices when come together creating something quite bright. There is nothing like the splendor of a star filled night. I liked the dialogue.

Reminded me of my favorite poem and the only one I have memorized called the man in the moon written for me by a friend years ago.

[Emily Feret]

Wow, I loved what you just wrote. Thank you so so much for your review! :)

[Jack Cassidy]

Great poem... Yeah, there might be some more editing to do, but you definitely have a handle on creativity and your story is well thought out. I can imagine reading this as a bedtime story.

[Emily Feret]

Thank you :)

[Leslie Philibert]

Like this, a story with charm and humour, well written...

[Emily Feret]

Leslie thank you so much for your review

[icelandicblue]

What a beautiful story. Strength in numbers make the small shine! I love the personification and the dialogue. This is a wonderfully inviting porquoi poem. Well done.

[Emily Feret]

How sweet. Thank you so much!

[Jayden Ireton]

This is a wonderful piece. It is well thought out. The wording is strong as is the format. This whole poem had me smiling. It is very imaginative. Keep up the great work. I would love to read more like this.

[Emily Feret]

Aw how sweet. Thank you!

[Just Kim]

This is a really well written write,
enjoyed!

[Emily Feret]

Thank you so much tabbycat

[ba_mcfarlane]

This is an excellent piece of work. Have you considered it being illustrated as a child's story? Or a children's book?

[Emily Feret]

I would absolutely love to do that one day

[Nhes G.]

A cute poem, it is! My smile never faded from the very first line up to the last. I just don't know why, but there are some lines that tickles me. I enjoyed reading it..

[Emily Feret]

Thank you so so much!!

[RachelReaper]

I loved this poem, the theme of it was awesome and it told a really great story. 100/100 :)

[Emily Feret]

Aw!!! Thank you so much!

[RachelReaper]

your welcome

[Wórdsmíth]

That's a lovely write, nice ink
well written

[Emily Feret]

Much appreciated :)