The Mighty Do Fall

Sort of a fun story

Said the mighty moon to the stars,

"Look how small you all are!
I bring light to the world,
Time after time,
As you all struggle from afar".

"While I stand alone,
You serve me, and my throne;
No one cares much for a star".

The stars for years had served the moon
With not so much as a single outcry,
But one brave star,
With passion in his heart, yelled,
"Alone we may be small, but together we fill the sky!".

"Oh my what is this?" The mighty moon sneered.
"A tiny yell filled with pride? Please tell me more,
Shine bright, do not hide!"

The outspoken star
Had inspired a few more
To raise their voice
And speak their mind.

"You're as hard as stone".
"And as cold as ice".
"Changes in you bring troubled tides".

"You wax and you wane,
Diminishing with each phase".
"We bring life long after we die,
Shining still bright after our days".

"What hope we bring as we fall!".
Then the star who spoke first,
Perhaps said it best of all,

"One night you show full,
But that should not bring you such pride,
There's also one night,
You struggle to shine at all".

The stars then all began to sing
Together, a night-sky harmony.
The man in the moon then began to weep,
Thew himself at their feet,

His throne fallen, and gone.

Then in his utter defeat,
He slunk off in retreat,
To give way to the morning Sun.

Reviews

[DCT ponderings]

It beckoned the power of individual voices when come together creating something quite bright. There is nothing like the splendor of a star filled night. I liked the dialogue.

Reminded me of my favorite poem and the only one I have memorized called the man in the moon written for me by a friend years ago.

[Emily Feret]

Wow, I loved what you just wrote. Thank you so so much for your review! :)

[Buddhistboy73]

Love this poem, and the way it shows us the other viewpoint....so useful in life sometimes....when we all unite against something, we are greater than the sum of our parts....love the idea of the moon and the stars used here.
And then the final stanza is a great finish for me...simple, yet effective...and I can picture the moon skulking off, only to be replaced by the bright morning sun....
Thanks for sharing...:)

BB

[Emily Feret]

Thank you for such a kind review! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i love the way you use personification and metaphor...the stars and moon, much like the little people and those in power...and those in power will get their come-uppance...or better yet come-downance.

nicely done...
jacob

[A. Amos]

Wow! I have to admit this one the best poetic conversation, I have ever read:)

You're insanely talented...in a very good way and will be back to read more

[Emily Feret]

Wow what a compliment! Thank you!

[VelvetRosetta]

I am impressed. I love the way you wrote this and the message is powerfull!
Wonderfully done!

[Emily Feret]

Your kind words bring a smile to my face

[Nix]

What an amazing poem... Tells a beautifully moral tale. Very well written.

[Emily Feret]

Wow thank you so very much!

[annie lee]

What a beautiful story! I loved the characterization of the moon and stars; their dialogue was inspired. It reads as a triumph. Well done.

[Emily Feret]

thank you!

[ayosonolowo]

A wonderful poem, full of defferent kind of ideas, i really like it, nice one you've penned

[She With Eyes Like Unsh..]

You have written a wonderful poem! Keep up the great work!

[Alice Patinkin]

"Alone we may be small, but together we fill the sky!"

I love that. :)

[Emily Feret]

Thank you so much for your kind words

[Parsimony]

Quaint and convivial anecdotal tone. Pleasing to the ear. Stacking up the astrological intricacies of either type of celestial bodies.

[Emily Feret]

What a beautiful review. Thank you!