I see you

A poem about a girl i kind of love just a little bit

The first thing i noticed 

Was your smile

Your wonderful, beautiful 

Sad smile

A smile that didn't quite reach your eyes

Didn't quite look real

But a smile none the less

The second thing i noticed was your eyes

Your bright beautiful eyes 

Sad eyes

Eyes that look like they have lost 

And seen lost

Eyes that were so beautifully sad 

And full of life at the same time

Eyes that looked like they had cried 

More tears than most

More tears than they like to admit

Next i noticed your hands 

Fingertips callused from

Hours of playing 

Pressing on guitar strings

Until blood was spilling from your skin

And the pain

Was too much

Hours of sweet melodies

Humming through the air 

Soft and beautiful

Then i noticed your hair

How it falls down gently

And frames your face

With sandy blondes and browns

Lightened from hours you

Spent at the beach

Washing away your troubles

Then i saw what i had missed

Your scars

They were not beautiful

Or wonderful

But they were not ugly either

They were a part of you 

So faint

Most would not notice 

Most would not think

But i knew 

I had seen your sad smile

And sad eyes

And the way you kept playing

Even when your fingers were bleeding

And i know

You had forgotten

How to hold hands with your heart

So i held your hands instead 

 

Reviews

[misha]

Beautiful poem =) Great job!

[ANTO]

A beautiful homage and tale of love
The ending is superb

[Duckey]

Oh thank you very much! You are too kind :)

[therisa]

Emily, reading this poem, could feel my eyes tearing, at your expression of love and compassion, toward your love. Hoping she realizes, what a special person, she has found, in you. I hope, you can share your beautifully descriptive poem, with her, knowing this will change your relationship, forever. She deserves to read this, as painful, it may be to your heart. I hope, if I'm as lucky, as your friend is, you could share this romantically heart baring poem, with me. Thank you, Emily, for your courageous sharing of this poem, with us.

[Duckey]

Thankyou so much xx She has read it actually, it made her cry. In a good way I hope. She never realised I think how much I payed attention and how much I actually care. And you are very welcome! xx

[therisa]

That's great news, Emily. Hopefully, things will improve, for you. :)

[Abhishekizy]

Its a beautiful definition of a beautiful mind. Lines which stuck me most?

" Sad smile...
A smile that didn't quite reach your eyes."

[Duckey]

Thankyou so much xx

[Karter Vaugn]

I completely agree with this. Favorite line of this beautiful piece

[Emily]

Love the way you started it!
Well done!

[Duckey]

Thanks very much xx

[Shae]

Wow !! Really something special

[Duckey]

Oh thank you :)

[Sunya]

Really good imagery :) the ending was awesome as was the whole poem..heart-touching...so much sadness really incredible use of words :)
loved it
-Sunya

[Duckey]

Thank you so much :3 You're too kind. Means a lot.

[Eleanor]

Wow I really liked it :) first of all it tells how much we notice about the person we love.
How much we care and can see the slightest discomfort in their actions.
Its beautifully written. Keep writing!

[Duckey]

Thank you so much! When you love someone that much i think what we notice about them that no one else does is what sets us apart