The Note

The Note

A Poem by Emily19
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It's pretty much a poem about suicide. Please don't read if this could trigger you. Just remember somebody loves you. You'll be okay.

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I'm  sorry you couldn't fix me,
and for all the trouble I brought.
I'm sorry you couldn't see,
It got so bad I had to leave.
 
This world brings you down a lot,
but most can handle it.
I'm sorry that I couldn't hold on,
as my life crumbled beneath me.

But most of all, I'm happy,
Because now I'm finally free.

And that note that was written for us,
Was the worst thing I'll ever read.
For you thought you took all your pain away,
But you really just gave it to me.

© 2015 Emily19


Author's Note

Emily19
So uh...let's not talk about how easy it was for me to think up a poetic suicide note. What did ya'll think?

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I really liked this. For someone so young you really have talent.

It really makes me so happy to see someone using writing as an outlet for their inner demons.

I look forward to reading more of your work. Thanks for the read.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Emily19

9 Years Ago

Thank you!
I do like this, all the components are there. Personally I would have switched

"But most of all, I'm happy,
Because now I'm finally free."

and

"For you thought you took all your pain away,
But you really just gave it to me."


for placement.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Emily19

9 Years Ago

That does sound good. Thanks for the feedback!
I like this a lot. It's a bit cliché as suicide notes go. But amazing. You've got some really good points here. I guess we all get these feelings at some point or the other. So most people will be able to relate. So I'm glad you decided to post this. Great read. Keep up the good work.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Emily19

9 Years Ago

Thanks Kristan!

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Added on August 5, 2015
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Tags: suicide, deppression, note, pain

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