flighty

Capricious legs landed

on the limb of the tall, tall tree.

Wayward wings spread wide

in exultation of the smiling sun.

Giddy notes warbled unsteady

fluctuating through variable air.

Impetuous heart lifted--

uncertain--

on the wild wind.

But it wasn't a compliment,

was it?

Reviews

[Emily]

You have such a way with words. And such a talent for packing so much meaning into so few words. "Impetuous heart lifted-- uncertain-- on the wild wind." Absolutely beautiful! What a feeling it would be to fly... your beautiful descriptions paint the picture and help me to imagine what it would feel like.

[Jasmine]

I like the possibility of the double-meaning, and the uncertainty of the whole piece. Your images are quite beautiful.

[Raef C. Boylan]

Interesting. I've always hovered between whether 'flighty' is a compliment or not. However, when applied to a bird I reckon it is appropriate/complimentary (unless the bird is a penguin or ostrich, in which case it's a bit mean).
Nice use of alliteration throughout, plenty of creative language.
Great write.

[emmajoy]

I have a feeling that just for once someone is gently accusing a bird for not being as well behaved as should, hence the word 'flighty', and that phrase, 'Giddy notes warbled unsteady .. ' . It would be great to know your secret but then, we all have to find our own bird and our own means of reaching high and higher. I'm off and away, flying south ..

[TL Boehm]

Wayward wings spread wide

in exultation of the smiling sun.

I just love this line. It reminds me of being a child - there's something sublimely hopeful in it

[Donald Meikle]

Yes

[STAR CHILD]

i like this it is beautiful

[TheFemininePad]

It's good to be back to Writer's Cafe, and to see such great poems. Very well worded, and descriptive. I really enjoyed how you used the structure of the poem. It brings my imagination to life. Great job.

[vivekanand]

it was , perhaps the exultation of the joy that was liberation

[FireWoman]

Your flowing words fall like perfect petals to form a lovely piece of art.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

oh I like these graceful branches~ they are grace in their lovely lean~ =)~