the next time he calls, I should answer

or, do what I want

go ahead

draw that line in the sand

make it stretch as far as you like

maybe it will curve and snake and wander for a mile or two

while you're at it, maybe you could build some fences and a wall, to keep me out,

or pile up all your doubt and suspicion and assumption--

until you can't see me anymore

 

I'll be over here

building my sand castle

Author's Note

funny what words can do sometimes

Reviews

[Tommy]

So many lines, and walls, just bury me in the sand before you draw that line, making its center point across my body, because half of me is yours, and the other half, well I feel deserves a castle. And maybe one day when you forget these terms of boundaries, you can come to rule once again, along my side, as my better half....

Ha, this is what popped out when I read this... I love it Emily!!!

Great Write!
RLG,
Tommy

[Jeff Loquist]

he'd be a damn fool not to

[arbitrary jane]

... or fake a phony accent and then giggle to yourself. :)

walls and fences and lines... and bad roads re-traveled... they do blind, absolutely.
castles are so much better.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Funny, fierce and relaxed all at the same time, great wording, well done.

[zig]

well, i like this. i like the build up. its like a commentary on my least favorate poem of all time "fences make good strangers", or whatever its called. this also has some great sounds, nice movement. very well written my friend.

zig

[OT]

I love this one!! the last 2 lines completely make it for me - they're just so clever in opposition to the previous lines - the simple making a sand castle enlivened by the backdrop - draw your line - twist it as you wish - hell add a wall too it'll give shade and protection for the castle!! nice!!

[Ladysue]

oh yes...build that sand castle...love these thoughts..

[Alicante lullaby]

I'll be over here
building my sand castle
lovely.

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

This touched me deeply , and I dont know why , maybe I miss that type of poetry , simple as it should be, leaving place for the imagination . sentimental as you are
xx

[Lachenille Papillion]

The quickest way forward is to draw a line of obstruction in front of oneself, lol. well done.