anybody have a map?

He only has so much patience.

If I only knew where the fault lines lie,

I might not dance so near the chasm.

Reviews

[V.B.]

There are a great number of things I love about this--chiefly how much you manage to say without explicitly saying anything at all--but the one thing I really want to commend you on is the title. I don't have many beliefs about what poetry should be, but I do think that a title should not simply be lifted from the content of the poem, but instead, it should add something to the read. Yours does, even if in a tongue-in-cheek fashion, help to drive your point home. Lovely.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

But it is comforting to know, that at ‘the right time’, He puts our compass straight; we only have to keep our faith!

Creatively written and poignantly addressed in but a few, but powerful potent words. Great share!

Phillip

[paul]

beautiful, haunting

[Jeff Loquist]

isn't it fun to dance sometimes though?

[Poeticadia]

Such a clear image to this passing thought. A sigh of regret in 'if i only knew' makes the chasm seem all the more dangerous a place. And yet the dancer realises there are more risks than she admits.

[OT]

ooo this is a little gem - the chasm - to circle the edge - don't get too close!! boundaries - so many different things this calls to mind - all centres around that damn line! ha nice!

[Alicante lullaby]

i think its his love that affords him so much patience...
these three lines touched me.

[Sel Whiteley]

This is stunning, so succinct:

If I only knew where the fault lines lie,
I might not dance so near the chasm.

powerful

[Desert Dreamer]

Some people have a lot of those fault lines and I think even if we had a map, the fault lines would move to where we stand. This sounds like a relationship of "walking on eggshells", I've spent too much time around people that this poem would describe well. Great title!

[Siddhartha]

And a map may not help
for the edges are serrated, if at all...

There is a tone of sanctity and morality here which makes this beautiful short even more killer...

[Nothing Personal]

this is a killer short. it's a great way to put the point across, help me find me the way where i dread not to step upon..if only he saw this, he would have more patience and you may not need maps after all..