obsessed

Thoughts of her

gnaw at his focus

too persistently;

he finds himself

consumed

more and more

with her smile

with her voice.

He can't remember

when it started

or how it felt

before there were

thoughts of her.

He is drawn

by something

he can't name.

Consumed

with ideas

to maneuver

him nearer

the object of his desire.

Maybe today

will be the day.

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

A feeling I think we have all experienced on some level. I like the shorter choppier lines in this one, because it gets at the core of frenzied obssession quite well. The last two lines are beautiful and foreboding...perhaps the obssession will turn bad, perhaps it will be a happy ending; who is to know? Nicely done.

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. "objects in the rear view mirror appear closer than they are" ... it takes so much courage ... so much ... to face oneself ... man or woman ... and not be in denial about an obsession ... for me this verse just rips apart the delusion ... yet with gentle persuasion and eloquently ... i feel terrified sometimes that i might be obsessing over something and i don't even know ... you are the queen of life, thought and brevity ...

[Michael of Gilead]

If a man never becomes obsessed with the object of his desire does love ever bloom?

Very nicely done

[Brad]

can please get out of my head and using my thoughts as poetry?

[KUFU]

Nice Ema. You've; in writing, captured the lust of primal want. I like how you traverse smoothly the gender gap. If I didn't know any better, I'd say you were me penning some poem about some unattainable desire.

[Dana Kathryn]

Hiya Emily,I like this one lots!! You touched on the deadly obsession very well....made it seem almost normal lol,What is normal anyways?? haha :) I like how easily it flowed,I like the ending...

[Alicante lullaby]

lovely.

[Bubo]

Object of desire, where it consumes every thought, every need needing to be met.......wonderfully written with a hint of mystery......obsession can destroy........I loved reading this and knowing many relate to your words.

[Dream Weaver]

Sharp and crisp delightfully done!
I enjoyed this Emily, great write.

[Scott Christian]

I love how the poem has this tight structure to it, almost as if the poem itself is racing along with the thoughts of the subject. I find myself in the same situation, so the poem has a very personal feel to it for me. Wonderful work.

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{well written-this reads so smoothly and free flowing--magnificent poetry}

james:-)