'the woman I am'
Emily B,
Refreshing to simply be, to just live, breathe, feel, work...because it is necessary.
There is a time and a place for every season of one's life.
Live and learn...who do we need to please? Hard lesson I would rather not take.
The last three lines worked for me;
"I will feed armies, and carry babies, and kill spiders..
When I need to.
And I will teach my daughters to be strong."
Hard work and consistency are in building ourselves, our children and sometimes others.
Bless you,
Kathy
Posted 2 Years Ago
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2 Years Ago
I had forgotten this one. I miss that young poet. Her voice had so much light in it.
I think you can do so much with this poem. I love the feel, but you can touch more into the woman feel. You should read Sylvia Plath to get some ideas. She was an amazing poet fighting the double standard of 1950s America.
A nice, bold take on the woman's anthem. The language is forceful, and yet elegant. It has the power of the march, and the determination only a woman can have, that is, if she has to... Great job!
I liked your poem my friend. I too believe women have more strengths than men and are able to adapt with reality staring them in the face.
TT-TTO-NI-K
Elk
Sweet and strong. Sometimes I make coffee that way. Those last 3 lines are a great message to finish upon - Andrea Gibson-esque [which is high praise indeed from me]. A world populated by your children would be a better place.
to the Lost Boys
I am no Wendy;
but my voice brings you back to me.
And you sit around my feet,
anxious for a story
or a kiss.
Listening to my words
spinning adventures,
like so much g.. more..