seduced

inspired by Jibey

your words

ran away with me

this morning

 

maybe it was the fog

creeping in through open windows

til I surrendered

 

maybe my imagination

was seized strongest

by the first words I met on waking

 

maybe I dreamed you

only to wake and hear you whisper

stay close

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

love it...simple language and strongly emotive .. and is written to be taken on more than one level .. those first thoughts and impressions on waking ..or just before...can have such a strong impact on at least the first few hours of the day ..if not more .. the space between dreams and the "real" world can be stretched sometimes ..and oh how the imaginations can get ones full attention ... i love the title and i love the poem ..and how they work together to create a sensual thread .. so glad we have met.
E.

[Emily B]

thank you so much

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

My favorite one of you until now ! :) very beautiful , every one would like to received this as a gift

[Sasavet]

Very mysterious. It's haunting but hopeful, and you have a strong voice. The use of fog is very vivid, and I find fog always pops up in my writing too, with the lingering sense of uncertainty and confusion. This is a bittersweet piece, and it leaves a lingering feeling after reading it.

I feel that, although simplicity is very useful at times, the "ran away with me, this morning" seems a bit too simple. A bit more imagery could be used.

The ending really sums it up though, it's lovely.

[TL Boehm]

wow. just WOW. the second and fourth stanzas are really strong for me - they just jump off the page....

[Coyote Poetry]

This is Poetry. Gentle and sweet leading the reading to a beautiful ending. Description and story was perfect. Poem is a pleasure to read this morning.
Coyote

[Ladysue]

I agree with Tony, this is a poem that stirs the heart with a tenderness. Beautifully and artfully composed...lovely...

[Gastroc.]

i enjoyed this quite a bit. it's one of those feelings you can both love and hate simultaneously.

[Megan Marie]

Beautifully written

[AK]

"maybe it was the fog
creeping in through open windows"

I love that line. Overall... another masterpiece!

[Alicante lullaby]

beautiful,,,short and full of feel,,,,delicate,,,dainty words like butterfly wings,,,a shimmering candle flame,,,

[Jola]

A beautiful and emotional poem...
Good job !!!