angels, sometimes

still nervous, no excuses

The angel of the Lord

sent me a message

the other day.

 

     Call your true love

     and learn ESP.

 

But willful child that I am

 

I politely declined

 

for one reason and another.

 

 

Who am I to follow direction

without question?

Reviews

[W.k.kortas]

Is there room for growth here? Yes. Does it require any apology as it stands? Not one bit. (Think of this as a "Donald Rumsfeld review" to this point). This could have been angry in tone, and it would have hit the ground with a thud. As is, it's winsome, almost playful (the notion of one of the Lord's angels beseeching you to "learn ESP" is borderline comic), which is (in my view, anyway) the perfect note to strike here.

[WhiteWillow]

Definitely one to be read over and over, and different in meaning each time. Love pieces like this, ones that get your brain engaged. An intriguing write

[roarke]

obviously written for some purpose I'm not aware of so this is an "as is" impression.

I think the tie-in line here is "for one reason and another" everything else is spelled out. This is the serious part of the piece and makes it individual to every reader. Maybe the one line of truth even.

for me personally, "call your true love and learn esp" said another way, "learn esp by calling your true love" which would make it akin to reverse speech and that of the devil and..... well, never mind.

but as they say, he DOES work in mysterious ways.....

[SkinlessFrank]

A wise choice.

[~Mariposa Una Lila~]

you are the poetic one Miss Burns...you cute lady, how are you?

[The Flawed]

It's a thought provoking poem, I had to read it again and think about it and read it one more time to decide if I like it, and I did very much so.
Good job, it's nice to be able to get people thinking, with a few words.

[Eric]

My propinsity toward brevity and tightly constructed word structures and simplicity of thought disagrees with our friend W.k.kortas. I believe this little rebellious poem is fully grown. The rest of his comments, yes, yes, and yes.

I love the sacred things that thread themselves through your work. There is something of the holy here.

Ebreezy

[Crazy Cat Man]

must be a poem about someone on drugs

[Raef C. Boylan]

Wow, 'the reviewer' actually engaged enough to ask a question about the writing! That's a good sign.

"Who am I to follow direction
without question?" - I like how this puts a spin on blind faith; it's usually more along the lines of 'who are you to question?'

Has Gabe seen this? Is he even still around?
Like W.k.k says, there's potential room for growth but stands up fine as it is.

Thanks for sharing it with us.

[TL Boehm]

You sound like one of "God's kids" you know what I mean? There is humor in this and an innocence. It is without malice. Hard to peg what I am trying to say - the TV is blaring and I am ornery - but this one is resonant. Peace.

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

neat, sounds moody, and willful, =) ---mishel