to my Muse

a passing fancy

I am a plain brown bird

singing off-kilter

through the darkness.

I wonder at your tribute

as it wafts upward

on these cold nights.

Those words

make me stronger

than I am.

 

My heart flutters

at the starshine heat.

 

May be

     I will fly . . .

Reviews

[JA!DEN*FROST]

What stood out the most to me was the "may be".
That line was special because you didn't simply write "maybe". You spaced it out.
"May" you used as an expression of wish.
"Be" you used in expression to exist.

That was amazing. I have to admit.
Sometime the little things stand out the most. Brilliant work. :}

[Georgia Gypsy]

I love the image here, very beautiful:)
K

[Sean Allen]

No bird can ever fly until it tries and falters a few times.

[raining]

i can see an off-kilter song coming out of the poets falling dark.
a bird is a good symbol and pulls the reader toward apprehension over something maybe, or not, maybe it is just part of a poem..... But something is pulling toward the subject, or writer, or conversation perhaps that holds her having... found confidence. we all have it and am finding that to be true, if the writer let themselves have confidence...is this making sense. i think writing needs to grow that way for all of us writers.

[TL Boehm]

Em, you have beautiful wings and an even more vibrant soul. When I read you I ALWAYS look up....because your words, they soar....

[Tony]

And so you have flown and perhaps your voice has gotten stronger...with the light and the warmth that now, surrounds you.

Tony

[Touché Armada]

Reminds me of the sole fish beneath the sand poem.

"May be" clever with your spacing. And because you be you fly hollow boned or not.

[Ken Simm.]

Just a lovely piece of work Emily.

[An owl on the moon]

I love the expression that the words of your muse make you stronger. Everything here flows so softly, so beautifully. I hope you fly.

[Eric]

"star shine heat." Nice. Very nice. So nice in fact, that I want to tuck that phrase into my pocket, pull it out and use it in one of my short stories.

I can see that you've taken your craft to a new place since I've been gone. Glad to be back to witness your star shine heat, friend.

Eric