to my Muse

a passing fancy

I am a plain brown bird

singing off-kilter

through the darkness.

I wonder at your tribute

as it wafts upward

on these cold nights.

Those words

make me stronger

than I am.

 

My heart flutters

at the starshine heat.

 

May be

     I will fly . . .

Reviews

[JA!DEN*FROST]

What stood out the most to me was the "may be".
That line was special because you didn't simply write "maybe". You spaced it out.
"May" you used as an expression of wish.
"Be" you used in expression to exist.

That was amazing. I have to admit.
Sometime the little things stand out the most. Brilliant work. :}

[Jibey]

A gentle reminder of how a little warmth and praise can help us to fly... Charming poem, thank you

[fireblossom]

You are no plain brown bird Emily :-) You are a beautiful gem sparkling. Another great poem from a great poet.

[Lizanne]

A plain brown bird you are not. Wonderful writing. Uplifting. I believe this little off key bird will fly and sing like a canary. You gave it spirit.

[Gandré]

This was sweet. So if one has just innocent wishes with no need for power or wealth just dreaming about love then we enjoy ourselves and when we enjoy ourselves then we are able to give love, that's what this poem told me. I liked very much.

[Raef C. Boylan]

I like the simple lack of envy in this poem; the narrator is self-deprecating in an optimistic way.
"starshine heat" - nice phrasing.
Clear admiration for the addressee of the piece.
Could feel you launching yourself at the end.

Great work Emily. Thanks for sharing it with us.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

such a soft and uplifting little write... amazing how someone special can make us feel like we can do anything and give our heart wings.

[AC Cheatwood]

I love this. The way that you put yourself into your writing creates a different world that the reader is thrust into. I can picture what you are saying. You certainly have talent.

[Creepy Swine Guy]

Surely you will fly! You fly on your words Mrs. Burns, you soar on your words.

[Rain]

This seemed like a tune that kept playing in your mind, that you couldn't shake...Until finally you decided to just get it out by writing it down...and when you did, you felt at peace, because it flew. Rain..

[Blue Sky]

singing off-kilter

through the darkness.

I wonder at your tribute

as it wafts upward

on these cold nights.

Those words make me stronger


very nice little piece, uplifting as well!!