timid

can I sit with you?

not too close

over here a little

I want to see what you see

I'll only rest my eyes on yours a moment

before I look back to the horizon

tell me

some private history that amuses you

let me hear the bravado in your voice

as I imagine great adventure

lean closer

so that your hand nearly brushes mine

as you paint pictures in the air

your wry smile

wreaks havoc with my heart

Reviews

[BrightEyes]

there is such power in a mere smile....yes the ending here was my favorite part. I love how you keep that little distance, not too close...asking for the sharing of secrets in seeing what they see. yes be close to me...but apart as well....but that smile....that all encompassing smile, will find my heart and send it racing. beautiful piece :)

[Plexiglass]

I like this poem and how timid everything is in it until the very last line which is like the big reveal and what is really going on behind that exterior. Truly good work. I like the lack of punctuation too because it kind of reminds me of nervous smitten rambling. Good work.

[Alaska Frost]

Great write! It's a wonder how just a smile can make someone feel so happy...it can get someone in a good mood. Very sweet poem.

[just is]

This one is so wonderful, it's full of compassion, I like this I could see the whole picture, this is worded so well.

[Gandré]

this was a pretty poem, fragments of the heart`s compassion....

[Nicole Marie]

Raw and truthful. Such accesible language. Easily resonates with me. I like your free-verse style.

[darkgurl]

This is a very well written write and so wonderful, can feel the emotion behind it....Kim

[Sarah B.]

it's that closeness with someone we strive towards, with the knowledge we can never be them that makes us beautiful as individuals :)

[Mariah]

Sweet and simple. I like it. And for some reason, I like that it has no title, whether you're going to change it or not..

'I want to see what you see'.

So many mental images spring from that one line.

[~The Queen~]

Very well written I loved it actually. Keep it up!!

-QueenofKings

P.S Could you do me a favour. Could you read my prologue on my book please. I want to see how many people I can get hooked like me. Thanks and have a wonderful day!!

[Pamela A. Lamppa]

Such a tenderly shared moment. When it's all about the other and the world and the story and the love. Oh this is just tender and gentle. It moves me to beautiful places where admiration goes deeper than vision, it rests in the heart. Excellence in this. ~Pamela