now we walk

it seems those walls keep tumbling down

Now we walk.

                   Out into the dark night.

Moon hidden
by the growth of trees.

                   I feel you there.

Your power.

Your eyes gleaming bright.

         I feel you breathing.

 

Closer.

                    Closer.

Every moment I feel you closer.

Knowing

 

          I will be a feast

                     for your hungry hands

ravaged by you
                    

                     moved by the night

           trembling

with the want of such a thing

your heat
           surrounds me

in ways I never felt

                           before

I melt and am reborn

on my knees

Author's Note

it wanted to stretch and reach

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This is different for you, which I quite liked. I felt the longing and the tentative craving that began as a ripple and ended as a wave. I can relate to this...just the pure expanse of abandon that at times seems so absolutely attractive.

Technically: I'm wondering at the many different single lines. I felt a little as though I was jumping from line to line instead of flowing. Just my personal opinion, though.

Overall, a sensual, beautiful piece.

[Emily B]

thanks, at one time it was all left justified, still trying to decide what it wants to be when it grows up

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Oh, I like the right and left formatting, just the separate lines made it a little choppy. Was thinking more of a "short stanzas" feel...I don't know. Then again, I'm not some stylistic genius, so allow it to grow on its own, you will make the right choices!

[An Ordinary Woman]

Let the walls tumble down Emily, let the words come and talk for your heart. This is sensual and beautiful, I love the tone to it! Like a slow dance in a burning room. :+)

[mick weller]

Ooo, some fine rain would be nice... wet grass
`al fresco`

'trembling
with the want of such a thing'
full of desire and deeply sexual - let it flow

[Raef C. Boylan]

Wow Emily, you've never made me feel like a voyeur before. Lol.
This is...dark and finely woven. Excellent pacing, and the way you connected heat and those final lines...something a reader goes back to for another taste. Great work, truly.
The choppy one-liners don't actually read as choppy, more atmospheric, building up to a climax [honestly no crude pun intended there, friend].
Thanks for sharing this with us.

[Jamie]

Hot.

[Spoken]

The power and allure of passion is irresistable. At times feeling so good you wonder if it's right or wrong. Great write, strong words

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Steamy stuff and a poet's thundering velvet hand, excellent.

[Dezaraye]

This is definitely sensual ... and alluring. I like it a lot. You pulled us through something private and I felt like I was intruding, but still couldn't pull away.

[Micky]

Very powerful. A great poem.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Wowee - a tremendously sensual walk indeed...what a great ending...this reminds me of my poem 'The Room' - not too much and just enough to tantalize the tastebuds. Great work. Going in my favorites. Delightful. Thank you as always for sharing your immense talent for subtlety and power in the same breath.
Light,
Siddartha

[TL Boehm]

wow, a different almost chilling tone for you...well crafted - surreal....I think you could write anything you wanted to.