Clairvoyant

Written for the Magritte contest

small space
curled tightly
walls will crumble
wings will unfurl
what once was dormant

waiting

will               fly                  away

    air                           light                    wings

merrily                      singing

melodic                notes              perched             on              vision

Reviews

[aponijose]

The gravity of your piece really is surprising. It is more so considering the simplicity of the words you use. I really do think that you are talented. You are a magician with the ability to turn paper airplanes into carrier ships ready to rescue soldiers from the war. Imagine what you can do when your poetic voice meets metal.

You can probably end poverty as we know it.

[Emily B]

it occurs to me i haven't been using my voice in exactly the right way . . . so much work to be done

[Zane Mathias]

beautiful imagery dear. Emily i love reading your work cuz it is always so fitting nothing is out of place.

[Phibby Venable]

perfect poem, Emily. excellent ending.

[The Tao of Bri]

You do Magritte well here! I love Magritte and you ecapsulated his themes well in his art!! AWESOME

[AK]

This is way cooler than my winter-numbed little brain can even comprehend right now. I just know it is very, very nice.

[Robert Luna]

Not sure why but this placed a smile on my face which I needed so thank you. This was whimsical and had a feel of a perfect breeze that flowed across it so perfectly. I really enjoyed this.



Great Job!!!!!

[K]

Your use of 'w' sounds make the poem very fluid and flowy, and I was going to say that it had a sort of surreal feeling to it before I noticed that you wrote it with Magritte in mind. It all makes sense! Ha! I love how it starts off very claustrophobic feel and then just lets loose. You use such great imagery that works well and comes to life with very few words.

[Shadows of Sight]

This was great. Not only was it seeing into the future! But it was a time going through lifes metamorphisis!
Great Job!
You described the change so wonderfully!

[Angel Bird]

Your poem displays a wonderful imagery. It is a happy feeling one gets while reading. This is great.
I think you'll do great in the contest. Well done!

[Wulfstan Crumble]

Mysterious. Im not sure what to make of it. At first i thought you might be in the clairvoyants tent. Then with the walls crumbling it seemed like a kind of apocalyptic vision. the dormant part made it seem like a latent power within you. The ending seemed hopeful at least. Was definately intriguing.