Clairvoyant

Written for the Magritte contest

small space
curled tightly
walls will crumble
wings will unfurl
what once was dormant

waiting

will               fly                  away

    air                           light                    wings

merrily                      singing

melodic                notes              perched             on              vision

Reviews

[aponijose]

The gravity of your piece really is surprising. It is more so considering the simplicity of the words you use. I really do think that you are talented. You are a magician with the ability to turn paper airplanes into carrier ships ready to rescue soldiers from the war. Imagine what you can do when your poetic voice meets metal.

You can probably end poverty as we know it.

[Emily B]

it occurs to me i haven't been using my voice in exactly the right way . . . so much work to be done

[Brianna Brie]

Very pretty words...so light and airy!

[theludus]

air light wings


melodic notes perched on a vision.


i like the freedom of those lines very much and how you could think of the melodic notes as writing/ or/ or or/ the gentleness of a bird. I like it when poetry appears and does one thing that words are not supposed to do.

[paul]

very clairvoyant

[An Ordinary Woman]

...perched on a vision...oh that's soooo good! I love the way the poem's structure crumbles away as you suggest with spaced words, it gives a sense of timeless, so beautiful Emily dear

[Desert Dreamer]

The second law of thermodynamics...written in poetry...should I call it poetrydynamics? You have sent my mind off into a world of facts I thought I had forgotten.

Upond deeping thought, his poem represents to me how ideas spread...starting with one individual who teaches another who teaches another and eventually the idea seems to take on a life of its own...

[HoorayForUnderdog]

What a wonderful word illustration of breaking boundaries, the love of freedom, and the beauty of reinvention!

[Crowley]

Poem entropy....I love it. Very creative and superb writing.

[Dezaraye]

I just read this again ... and I loved it just as much as I did the first time. :-) I had to revisit it and tell you how beautiful your words are!

[OT]

I love the layout of this! the space expanding almost, words flying away! the last line is my favourite! and I hope you won said competition!!

[Narnie]

The opening of the mind and words to expand into other minds... excellently fixed on the page, Emily. Good luck with the comp!