Poetry

it grew wings and flew away. . .

Poetry is a place.

 

It's where I put my heart

and you pick it up to see.

 

My triumphs and scars

are engraved there.

 

It is impossible for us

to keep such things

to ourselves

 

and so we share.

 

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Poetry is a destination.

 

It's the hundred extra steps
between you and me.

 

Our hopes and haunts
are engulfed

In the lost ellipses
of forgotten worlds.

 

We cannot share
enough
to be completely found

 

and so we write.

 

 

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 <table cellpadding="4" width="300"><tr><td width="50" valign="top"><a href="http://www.writerscafe.org/link/310557/"><img src="http://www.writerscafe.org/uploads/stories/tiny/06501700-1205402944.jpg" alt="" border="0" /></a></td><td valign="top"><font size="2"><a href="http://www.writerscafe.org/link/310557/"><b>Metamorphosis</b></a></font><br />A Poem by Emily Burns<br /></td></tr></table>

 

Author's Note

The next incarnation of "Poetry" can be found in "Metamorphosis". I would include the link but I'm technologically deficient most days.

Reviews

[Robert Luna]

This was so beautifully written. You hold so much wisdom and truth here. You really made me look into myself with this as this felt so personal and truly like a part of yourself placed on a page. I am so happy that I got to read this. I really think you expressed this perfectly. This is going into my favorites so I can enjoy it again.


Great Job!!!!!!

[Doug]

that's exactly how i feel about it. im not comfortable sharing with others how i feel all of the time, but nothing assuages the need to speak out one's emotions like writing. it's always nice to see someone capture a truth eloquently in poetry. well done, emily!

-doug-

[Christel Grady]

Another lovely piece, Emily! We write because we HAVE to. Into my favorites this goes! Thank you!

[Helen Woodward]

I like this very much, it is an intelligent piece of prose that is praiseworthy. You have managed to put the work it takes to string aptly placed words together, in a succinct and readable piece...
Helen:-)

[Strife]

I see...
Very nice. I think I get what you're trying to say here.

[J. Hampton]

"poetry is a place"

"poetry is a destination"

it is the mobious existance of a poet...
where we want to be...where we want to go ...where we wind up no matter what...
and...the only way to get there..

I sooo...love this ...we cannot run an hie form it..it is...us

Blesssssssss

[Edward Carr]

I really like this poem and I think it really works. I like the metaphors that you use for poetry being a place and destination. They are original. This poem also has some very strong lines. Lines two and three particularly as well as four and five which is a great metaphor and original. My heart might be cliche in line two. I just think you need to use some more concrete nouns, but other than that with a few revisions, this poem definitely good for contests. Lookup winningwriters.com and urbis.com. I will check out some of your other stuff later, been kind of busy.

[An Ordinary Woman]

Your right, poetry is a place. I've missed poetry while I've been away. The way you wrote it, it is absolutely, perfectly logical Emily. Poetry as a place, I love it!

[PianoandPage]

i love the end emily....

"We cannot share
enough
to be completely found
and so we write." - this is sort of a sad but beautiful truth.

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This is very well done ... inspiring and truthful. I enjoyed it immensely.

[Dizzy-Izzy]

Bless you oh techno deficient sister!!

I really love this, I wanted to paste the part that I relate to the most but, after reading it 3 times I found that I would have had to paste the whole thing, and that would just be silly.

I often wonder if some of what I write is truly mine, or if I read it and loved it on some other forgotten day. It's as though, when I create something I truly love... I feel that it couldn't possibly have come entirely from me, you know? That is just the way it is with creation, someone touches our hearts or lives, if only for a brief moment and from that spark, something new and wonderful comes to life...

I have a question... ? In your note, you apologize for breaking the flow. Why? I am no scholar or expert on literary things, so I am not sure what you meant. I think the two parts compliment each other beautifully. All the places I am destined to go, should be such as this... have a lovely day.

Kristina