Borrowed

 

I borrowed some words once

found them floating on the wind.

They were breezy little words

full of fun and laughter.

I held them close.

We smiled and sang.

And letter by letter,

I spelled them out

for you to see.

 

No, the poem's not signed.

Foolish man--these words

were never mine

to begin with.

 

They were only borrowed

from the wind.

 

Reviews

[Kara Emily Krantz]

gorgeous. i adore the ending - "the little man" and words being borrowed from the wind so you can't claim them as your own! fantastic idea. :)

"I held them close.

We smiled and sang."

adorable. the lilting laughing quality of those lines is adorable, and really catches the reader.

[kurrupted]

wow i really really love this piece, short and well penned, i love its flow too. indeed what we borrow can never be ours. thanx for sharing.

[Benjamin L. Weekly]

Emily - this has the feel of a poem written by a master. I will tell you why. Because it is brief, holds many different meanings, and is very simple, yet leaves you pondering what it might mean exactly for many minutes after you are done reading it.

Every writer will find truth in this, and every writer will see different words floating on the wind in their mind. Now, I have another important thing to tell you. Don't let it go to your head! :D

Please write more like this,
- Ben

(PS: I have a strong idea that this would easily qualify for publication.)

[robin]

Nice image. Spoken like a faerie spirit teasing some poor mortal. The concept of borrowing words from the wind.

[Zane Mathias]

ahh i really like this one! good job.. what is our writing but words on the wind

[Ken Simm.]

Its wonderful to be able to borrow such lovely words

[Songsungblue]

Lovely, lovely poem. One of the better ones here, I think. :-)

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Beautiful - just stunning - you have such a way with uplifting the spirit. To find the words on the wind and not claim them as your own is truly an insight into your loving soul - Great work.
Light,
Siddartha

[Jane Doe]

Such a charming poem! A very good read! Thank you for sharing.

[Jessica L Auster]

Good write! I'll be sure to read more of your stuff.

[J. Hampton]

I know now what it is about your work Emily...
beside the fact I feel you are truly a quality person.

Words....Poetry gives you joy
pure
simple
and complete joy

this is wonderful...the relationship you have with wors is special

Blessssssssss