Revival

written after a weekend at an 1805 Kentucky Camp Meeting

Like the ember
smouldering
unseen in the ashes,
my heart will someday
flame passionately.
One breath--
is all I need
to change this
seeming-charred soul
into a
furious
fire.

Reviews

[Blackbirdsong]

That's all it takes and sometime it can come from sources we least expect. One moment you're feeling down and the next completely rejuvenated and ready to conquer the world. I love the allusion of rising from your own ashes like a phoenix here.

[aponijose]

Well everyone does possess that ember; it is our gift as human beings. And it is your gift to have the ability to share its image to us. And for that, I thank you.

I think that the beauty of this piece comes from the conviction that you emitted regardless of how calmly you appeared to have stated it. It takes skill to do that, and you made it seem effortless.

[Bear]

I hope that love will ignite within my heart once again, as well. ;~) Long ago someone asked me "are you in love?" I told 'em no but, when I got to "thinking about it" hours later and over the next few night shifts at work... I realized that she'd seen in me something that I was then just realizing... Yes, I was in love. It had been a long time up til then, and been a long time since then... wouldn't surprise me a bit if one day soon I'm acting ridiculous once again... a sure sign that this fool's in love again.
Bear

[garrett]

good

[garrett]

nice

[garrett]

nice

[Nicholas Hallows]

Yes, very powerful! The images of the smouldering embers are really brought to life in my mind. I can imagine sitting round a dying camp fire having these thoughts. Great stuff!
NH

[Gildamare]

Oh boy! It sends chills...I want to know a little more though. I see it as anger that may flare soon...but it could be any kind of extreme passion. What happened to stifle the passion down to just an ember? What will set it ablaze again?

Great piece (and thanks so much for the kind words about mine)
:)mazy

[AK]

"One breath"... and the faith in God and ourselves that we, insignificant as we may think we are, can make a huge difference. One word, sometimes even just a caring touch, can be enough to offer hope and strength. We each are capable of so much more than we think, especially in the Spirit.
Beautiful and powerful piece!

[Chloe]

That's great! This is deep for a little poem. This is one of my favorites of yours.

[Cdnsurfer]

Very powerful piece, Em, filled with the sense of potentiality. The short, choppy lines makes it pace quickly but also give a sense of something on the edge, all of which lends itself well to the theme of anxiously waiting to break out. Stand back! I think your flame'll be blinding! Cheers, my friend. Rob