Revival

written after a weekend at an 1805 Kentucky Camp Meeting

Like the ember
smouldering
unseen in the ashes,
my heart will someday
flame passionately.
One breath--
is all I need
to change this
seeming-charred soul
into a
furious
fire.

Reviews

[Blackbirdsong]

That's all it takes and sometime it can come from sources we least expect. One moment you're feeling down and the next completely rejuvenated and ready to conquer the world. I love the allusion of rising from your own ashes like a phoenix here.

[PianoandPage]

love this. short and sweet and holds a promise of passion.

since i respect you, i have a few notes on this piece.

consider changing "seeming" to "seemingly"

and instead of "one breath" maybe something like "one confession" or "one whisper"

ok, nitpicking over. i love the simple and elegant use of metaphor here. you write with a simple grace that i envy.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Everyone knows the hottest fires are in the embers...especially in the long-burning fires.

[Sel Whiteley]

Wow, there's such an energy inside this poem that you capture the idea of fire. Love the image of one breath stoking the fire, great

[Nothing Personal]

powerful wonderful thought..empowering..transformation is only a breath away :-)

[paul]

really amazing. so simple. so brilliant

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

This is an accurate description of my Wife and I, when we found each other and our love, in the middle of our lives. Gracias.

[A.A.Romanczuk]

Oh..what a powerful image....a beautiful rendition of wanting to feel passion...this poem brings me to mind a phoenix rising from the ashes...beautiful...

[David W Moore III]

Amazing image. Distilled down into just a few words, it to bursts into flames as the reader reads it. Simply brilliant. I love it.