Pulse

We give too much power to things that don't matter. Written on 11/26/08

It beats with rhythm and power

Consistent

               No matter what

When we let chaos take control

Defiant

          No matter what

Every beat inspiring stability

 

Reminding us

No matter what

We're ok

 

 

Author's Note

Tell me what you think. What it made yo feel. Did this make you think of any experiences you've had?

Reviews

[Bennett Logan]

I agree. Despite everything else, pulse is constant. Your poem is extremely reflective and makes your reader think about his or her priorities. The only suggestion I could make, if you're interested in revising, would be to use more imagery. I would, for instance, be very interested in physically seeing "It beats with rhythm and power."

Just an idea.

Either way, I thoroughly enjoyed this piece, and I'll definately be reading more. Have a good one, and definately keep up the good work!

[Guardian]

Very nice. I throughouly agree and it's an interesting angle. I have to admit, I've never thoughout about our heartbeat that way, but everything you said is true. It does add stability to our life, and it's probably one of the few things we can count on. Great job!

[Cris Unine]

what???

[darkgurl]

Truthful write again, this is very well said....Kim