He Remembers

Something I wrote a while ago.

I remember when we were but children,

All the laughter we shared; all the glee,

I remember how life was so easy, 

How our souls were so eager and free,

I remember the scent of the flowers,

How their fragrance reminds me of you,

I remember the words that were spoken,

Every sentence we formed being true.

I remember our teenage obsessions,

All the letters of love that we wrote,

I remember our change in emotions,

And the kiss at the end of each note,

I remember us watching those movies,

Every story we witnessed unfold,

I remember the cuddles and kisses,

And all of the secrets we told,

I remember our school graduation,

The beauty just shone from your face,

I remember the lives we’d been planning,

And wondered if they would take place,

I remember every deep conversation,

How we knew that we go separate ways,

I remember the path we had taken,

And how seconds turned slowly to days,

I remember the years passing swiftly,

Each day sharing more than a bed,

I remember the ring that I bought you,

And each thought that would pass through my head,

I remember the day, time and minute,

That I crouched before you on one knee,

I remember the tear slowly falling, 

As you said that you would marry me,

I remember our wedding; so perfect,

In your dress laced in satin and silk,

I remember how I felt so nervous,

In the view of your family and ilk,

I remember your eyes: how they glistened,

As we whispered those words “yes I do”,

I remember the joy I was feeling, 

When I realised my life was now you,

I remember the time of your illness,

How the children would smile as they wept,

I remember the strength you were showing,

But you cried when we lay and we slept,

I remember your tears during treatment,

Your tears when the hair slowly fell,

I remember you dreaming of heaven,

Whilst being in a living hell,

I remember you saying you loved me,

As the strength slowly wilted away,

I remember the moments we’d lived through,

And begged you to hold me and stay,

I remember the word that you spoken,

As you slipped to the heavens above,

I remember, forever and always,

For you were my only true love.

Author's Note

Just rip it to pieces, happy to be criticised.

Reviews

[Mia]

How can you ask me to rip this to pieces when it’s just so incredibly beautiful…it should be depressing to reduce one’s entire life to seven stanza’s and yet it wasn’t at all. And even though its heart-breaking…this poem…it’s not because she was his one true love…he found her and kept her…he had her. So I found myself smiling at the end…he had her lifetime with her.
“That I crouched before you on one knee”
The ‘crouched’ in that line felt so out of place for me…when I think crouch…I think of tigers squatting waiting to attack and that’s not the image I’d associate with proposals.
Other than that Daniel, I loved ‘He remembers’!
“I remember our change in emotions,
And the kiss at the end of each note,”
Loved those lines most!