The Memories

I am jotting down the memories

That I miss having with you.

I miss you

But not sure if you know.

I miss seeing that big smile upon your face.

How it shined and brightened up any room.

Oh, how I miss it.

I remember the days

When we walked along the beach.

Our toes sinking into the sand grains.

The water splashed happily over our feet.

That was when you were here

But I haven't seen you since.

I admit it

I miss you...

 

Reviews

[Ferg]

a nice reflective piece.........

[Alicante lullaby]

so sad,,,beautifully you shed your tears,,,and narrate this honey pain,,,

[Eye0fthebeh0lder]

I like this. Who among us hasn't experienced some regret or sense of loss at the thought of things past. It's only natural to miss the people and the events in our past.

Great work.

[Matt]

i really like this..

[Tara Ghorm]

It is touching and sad... I really like it! Good work.

[Blake<3]

reminds me of my best friend...

[YourXArtist]

i agree with The Perfectionist. I like the poem though, it's nice, though I think it might have been a bit better without the last line....just my opinion...

[The Perfectionist]

The last line shifts the tone of the poem substantially. It's almost depressive and longing up until that point, when it's suddenly cheery, and I'm not sure that such a sudden shift is what you wanted, or is indeed good for the poem. Especially for one this short, you usually want to stick with one mood.

[_////---Elektrik Phanto..]

"oh, how i miss it" says it all and the beach part is really warming! thanks :)