My Ashtray Heart

My ashtray heart
Is torn and broken
With loneliness and forgotten love.
Alone from the attention
In which I crave, but don't receive upon request.
People choose to turn away
And I am left for myself to deal with.
I am alone once again
And not caring.

Reviews

[Jami Nicole]

Very well written. I to think it should be "of which" instead of "in which". Great peice overall. Beautifully written. Out of all the poems and peices I have read today this would be my favorite. Bt I would like to disagree with The Perfecionist(at least I think thats the name of the persons user) and say that the fifth line of tis poem does not disturb the flow of the poem.

[The Perfectionist]

I was immediately intrigued when the title was the same as the name you'd chosen, but I have to say, it's not immediately obvious how that label would apply with the information you provide about this state of loneliness. It doesn't have to make sense, however, that's the beauty of poetry. One thing that probably should make sense though, is that fifth line. It's longer than the others, and considerably so, breaking up the poem's flow. If that wasn't your intention, I would suggest shortening it if possible.

Also, as below, I think it should be 'of which' or simply 'which'

[The Lone Wolf Prose]

I love the image of the heart being like the left overs of yourself. That you are the shadows that are easily brushed aside by society, almost. Very interesting read.

[Lola Nation]

I believe it should be "of which" rather than "in which"

[Wicahpi]

Being alone with ones self isn't always easy, is it.
At least we can write about it. Well done!