Quiet Room

It resembles peace and shelter.
My get away place.
This is where I go
When I feel sad or lonely.
A place to release my words
On a blank innocent page.
There is nobody here
And I want to keep it that way.
My words save me from my inner demons
And no one else is able to overpower them.
But it is I who is able to defeat
My demons.

Reviews

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On a blank and innocent page...

[The Lone Wolf Prose]

I liked the idea to which you are portraying. I think maybe the fluidity would be better if the eye continues with some of your phrases as opposed to dissecting them. For example:

This is where I go
When I feel sad or lonely.

If you were to put it on one line like so:

This is where I go when I feel sad or lonely.

It is a tad bit easier to get the full ease of it; the complete sentence.

I am a lexophile (lover of words) so I try to use a wide spectrum of vocabulary. That is just me. I like to get the different textures and what not so I try not to repeat words to much unless it has a significance. Demons seems to have a significance but maybe there is another way you can describe them? More imagery perhaps. It depends on style. It is fine either way but even if you were to capitalize the last "demon" it would have more of an impact and almost a.... punch, if you will, giving the staple of these demons being YOUR demons. You see what I mean? Gives it more power. So it would read something like this....

My words save me from my inner demons
And no one else is able to overpower them.
But it is I who is able to defeat
My Demons.

Try working on this last bit. It is alittle hard to follow as it does seem a tad repetitive but great write. Keep writing!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

"But it is I who is able to defeat " I think the second "is" here should be "am".

[Dr Poet]

Yes, the closing lines are very true. For a writer that is the most effective way to come to terms with "demons perched along the amber sinews" (I apologize for quoting a poem of mine) that lead to the deepest and unexplored regions of our heart and soul.
A nice and bald statement, well done.

[Havatara]

I really liked what you were trying to express in this poem, but it didn't seem to flow very well. I don't really have any advice for you on that, but I did like it. Well done.