Layed on Concrete Driveway

It is cold out, alittle windy.

I lay on the concrete driveway

Not caring about anything

My mind seems to be distant in thought

I have a dog leash in each hand

My hand clamped around it.

I close my eyes

My heart is beating normally

And I feel as if I am invisible

I feel like a cloud,

just floating and mindless

I open my eyes

I am still here

I sigh...I wish I wasn't.

I wish this concrete would save me from this hell

Because I don't belong here anymore

Reviews

[Saphire Stridon-Traence..]

this is very well done and I must say, I know how you feel
one thing though, and you probably should pay no mind to it for it is a style thing but I would add an "and" before "I sigh.." so that instead of being "I am still here
I sigh...I wish I wasn't." it would be "I am still here
and I sigh...
I wish I wasn't." just a thought to help the flow :) really love it the way it is, though :D

[*~Kristy~*]

Did this really happen? I wrote a poem similar to this...Laying curled on my bathroom floor very sad... And it was true... I know how this feels...And I'm sorry if you went through it... :(