Create Me

Create me
As I stand before you.

Draw the very lips
You wish to fall in love with.
Pop in the eyes that
Will always leave you in a daze.
Mold out the curves that
You would love to touch.
The perfect tongue that
Could gracefully caress yours with each kiss.

Create me
As I stand before you.
I'm all yours.
Just yours.

Reviews

[Kye R H]

Absolutely beautiful work! It feels weightless, but has so much depth.
We are all shaped by the people around us, but willing for it to happen or being conscious of it implies a whole other experience. The sort of love you feel here is made clear, and I'm sure all those who have felt this form of love recognize it immediately.
Thanks for sharing this!

[Finally, Honesty]

I could picture the molding of a love. There is a simplisitc pleasure to reading this because the simple words hold so much meaning to someone who has experienced or longed to experience the emotions presented in this. Thank you for reviewing my work and I'm sure ill spend a lot of time enjoying yours

[I Am Svetlana]

Thank you for your wonderful and thoughtful review :) I thought of a wax doll or Barbie when I wrote this piece. There's just that something about dolls that intrigues me as I imagine what the maker is thinking or also, what the doll could be thinking as its being put together. And take your time going through mine, I have quite a bit on here and don't expect you to read everything, but I do hope you enjoy them like you say!

How beautiful it is, to be created by the one you love...
Very artistic write here my friend, it seems through your words, sculpture comes alive,
but it is you, alive.... fantastic.

- Elisa

[Effector Prime]

wow how symbolic.. one of the greatest poems I've read! :)

[Matching Socks]

Love this, and so many ways to interpret it.

Dom/sub
Artist/muse
Mentor/mentee

I love the possibilities. :)

[Bluefire]

This reminds me of Ellie Goulding's. "The Writer"
Lets see...
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oWcOQCbmBOw
There!
Anywho, I like this like I like that song.
A lot!
Well done. ^^

[Inda]

You have given every reader the gift of a perfect lover and then proclaim it is only for the reader and no one else! This is fantastic and it can be viewed in difderent ways too, i just love the fact that you let us fill in the blanks. Fantastic!

[Wall Hermitt]

Another awesome poem. Succinct and awesome. The writing effortlessly forces the imagination of the reader to adhere to your sensuously portrayed image.

Cool write.

Thanks for sharing.

W.H.

[Derek Smith]

I like it. Giving the complete self over. Total submission

[Sam Ryann]

Wow, this was a very good read. I really like the detail you put into it, "Create me, as I stand before you" somehow it reminds me of The Sims, but in a more romantic way.

[I Am Svetlana]

I kind of thought of the Sims too, but the image I had in mind was a person putting together and making a doll. Thanks for the kind review though and I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[Sam Ryann]

It reminded me of the sims since I was playing the game earlier, I can see now how it could be about a person making a doll though. Have you ever played the sims? I can't wait for the 4th to be released.

[I Am Svetlana]

I've played the second game a few times, but don't play them so much anymore :/ I'm not super good at it sometimes...

[Sam Ryann]

I'm terrible at the game unless I have the cheat codes for it so I can have more money than I'd usually make by making my sims work and stuff. I'm a cheater when it comes to Sims.