Oh, That White Powder

I've stained my heart.
Restrained the torturous lies.
Just take a look into my mind.

Chop the powder into a fine line.
My turn to snort it this time.
Give me a kiss so divine.
Let our fingers intertwine.
Our lives, possibly unwind.

The white powder
Drains away all the tears.
Sending electrical currents
Coursing through my veins.
"Oh, how lovely you are." It says.
Giving me those favorite tingles and chills.

Paint me a portrait of the skyline.
For in Heaven, we could dine.
Without a doubt,
You'd always be my Valentine.

Reviews

[Winter Renee Vineyard]

Beautifully written.....the love of a drug is strong! I know this from experience!

[I Am Svetlana]

Wow, me too! I tried it for about a month or two earlier this year when I was at school. Interesting stuff.

[Matt Sayer]

An interesting analogue to portray. One could consider the possible neurological damage that drugs can cause to be similar to the effects of a bad relationship, and the themes of addiction and mindless behaviour translate nigh perfectly.

Very thought-provoking. Great stuff!

[Raymond Federle]

I like this and I'm going to think about it for a while.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

i like this its kinda like a poem about love being like a drug, which it is :)
very romantic and deep, with real meaning to it.
i also love the rhyme scheme in this one.
well written :)

[Joe Barone]

wonderful, gorgeous work i shall say :) loving the personification describing the sensations

[Niki]

Very good. Well done, my friend.

[Amant Cache]

Love is a habit that's hard to break. Like smoking and taking drugs...reminds me of the Jenny Lewis song, Acid Tongue. It concisely portrays the bliss and shattering heart break that our addictions leave us with.

[Hannavas R.]

It sounds like someone has an addiction. I do like it though.

[Catherine Frain]

This is very creative. I loved it.