Phoenix's Morph

A cliché, I may present:
~ a phoenix, rising from the ashes,
glorious in all it's radiant colors
with sparks of gold,
streamers of red, 
with orange shimmering,
dancing in the mix.

Cliché continued, if I may:
~ she launches into the air,
the ash floating in the breeze.
Unintentionally symbolic,
the trail of black soot attached
represents forgiveness of her 
previous lifetime.
She enters a new chapter;
from there, she begins anew.

Alas, I hold no more clichés - however! -
Please, do continue:
~ perhaps, this magnificent golden
inferno full of patience
and life, passion and grace,
has been burdened with self-hate.
perhaps, as she enters her new chapter,
she can be brilliant -
in all that she has become.

Reviews

[SJ Mullins]

I love this. I think it is an incredible piece. I have often referred to my "rebirth" as a phoenix rising from the ashes. My "rebirth" (besides becoming a follower of Christ at the age of 10 years) I am referring to in my writing about the phoenix is referring to my recovery from severe depression. It has been a long hard road, but d****t, I made it through! I especially like the last few lines of the 3rd verse, "She enters a new chapter' from there, she begins anew." and I can relate to the whole last verse. It fits me to a T and what life has dealt me. I love the positive ending. I find it inspiring, as I can apply it to my own life as I enter my new chapter, I can be brilliant in all I can and will become! Outstanding write. You have a new fan. :)

[Elyralune]

I'm still struggling with my depression, but I've found that I'm simply tired of living feeling like this. So I'm picking my head up and moving forward. I want to be different, and I hope that stepping back into the writing world will help with that. Thank you so very much for you're wonderful review, it meant a lot hearing your perspective on my poetry, and the enthusiasm in which you described it.

[CookieMisfit1969]

I love how the words flow naturally as if they were made just for those sentences. You delivered your thoughts beautifully. I hope a lot of people can read this

[SleeplessVolcano]

I love the colors you used....gold....red & orange.....though I was hoping to see more colors in verse two and three......as if you painted liberally onto the canvas of the reader in the beginning, but then put the paint brushes away towards the end....:) Just my random feedback......call it a cliche.....:P

[Elyralune]

Thank you for the review! I'll take a look at it again and see if I can put my paintbrushes in action again for the later stanzas