The Witching Hour

Entry for Spooky Scary Poetry 2017 contest

Tick tock,

It was 3 o'clock,

She lit her candles,

Her door was locked.

She didn't run,

At 3:01,

She dressed all in black,

To have some fun.

The ravens flew,

At 3:02,

For they sensed the things,

She was about to do.

She cackled with glee,

At 3:03,

For her new favorite pet,

She would soon let free.

There was a distant roar,

At 3:04,

She danced and she chanted,

Til the candles were no more.

She was no longer alive,

At 3:05

For her horned little pet,

Had an appetite.

Now every night,

On All Hallows Eve,

You can hear her call,

From the belly of the beast.

And if you do,

You must beware,

Don't try to run,

Her pet is already there.

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

Playful, enjoyable read.

In the 5th stanza, 3rd line, it would read better if you got rid of "she" so it read 'she danced and chanted'... or get rid of "and" then replace it with a comma 'she danced, she chanted". It's not real serious advice just my personal taste on the flow of the wording. It's good work you've done regardless.

[JackValor86]

very clever, I like how the clock time drives the poem forward as you paint Halloween imagery through out the verses

[Relic]

......................Excellent poem, I enjoyed your skillful offering.

[AliceBarnes]

Very clever use of the time and rhyming the words with it, that was such a lovely little touch to it that really made this poem for me. I really enjoyed reading this, for some reason, I wasn't expecting to, but I really did end up liking this. The imagery was amazing, I loved the way you used the short verses to keep the pace of the poem up, almost like the time as each minute goes by. This reads almost like an old English myth or legend poem and I love all that kind of stuff so I think that may be one of the reasons why I enjoyed reading this poem so much. You mentioned that this was entered in the 2017 spooky scary contest, I wish you luck, and I am sure that the moderator will like this poem as much as I did.