I love you, finally.

I actually wrote this way back in March, 2012. A poem to thank the love of my life.

You look at me

when my eyes is but an empty gaze

when my tears

got the best

of all the smile I cherished

and I said, 'Hold me near.'

 

You hold me

when I am but an empty vessel

a fading strength and a faded faith

a hope burned out by ashen mistakes

when betrayal 

got the best

of all the happy send-offs I have heard

and I said, 'Stand by me.'

 

You stand by me

when I am but a speck of dust

wiped off from the shards of a broken heart

when my wounds are deeper

unreached by healing hands

when pain got the best 

of all the sacrifice

when despair is the one roof to lay my ruined heart

and you said you love me

 

but I missed it

so you had all the lines repeated

you stand by me, still and silent

a fortress undying

against my hell and rain

between my wings and a heaven

and I said, 'I love you.'

finally.

Reviews

[Anand Sehgal]

You hold me
when I am but an empty vessel
a fading strength and a faded faith..

you know, when we are in pink of our form everyone flocks around. People who sticks around during the days of distress, matter most in our lives.
A moving write
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[EloisaWrites]

Very true. It is on times when we it seems we have nothing to give that we discover the people who truly care for us. Thanks for the review, Anand. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it is good to finally hear the actual words, but sometimes the actions have already proven it.

[EloisaWrites]

That is very true, Jacob. Words touched us more when backed-up by actions. Thank you for the review. :)

[Sami Khalil]

This is real love and sacrifice standing side by side in silence of the moments. Excellent...:).........

[EloisaWrites]

Thank you for the review, Sami. I'm glad you liked it. :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)....................

[Lydia Shutter]

There is a wonderful intensity to your words in this love poem. Sometimes it takes a long time to fall in love....and once we know it is real, it is forever. Great stuff here. Lydi**

[EloisaWrites]

Thank you so much for gracing me with your review, Lydi. It is a dedication so there is much emotions while writing this. :)

[David Scott]

It took me years to find out how to really love someone...
Yes, I can love others and even need them in my life, but this does not need to diminish the admiration and devotion to the one who has chosen to love me in return. I am finial learning to see there are things I did not know that I did not know about love.
I'm not sure this was your intention, but this is part of what your poem stimulated in my mind.
You have shared a worthy write. Thank you.

[EloisaWrites]

Hi David. It's so kind of you to review my writing, too. I am happy to know that the poem has stirred you in that way. This poem can be interpreted in a lot of ways. The inspiration came from someone who stood by me and love me patiently, most especially during the struggling and difficult times when I forgot how to love. It's a wonder to receive that kind of love and so I celebrated it. Thank you for the review. :)

[David Scott]

Yes, I try my best to give at least one review or more when a poet reviews me. I find it a blessing to read other writers. You inspire me as do so many others here. Thank you for your energy.

[EloisaWrites]

We share the same experience. There's a great deal of talent and inspiration here at the cafe. Let's have a good read and hone the art of expression! :)

[zainul]

This is splendid account of a divine love.
The style is captivating.
I love your wonderful write.:)

[EloisaWrites]

Thank you for your kind words, my friend. It is a pleasure to connect to you again. :)

[zainul]

You are most welcome.
I am also very pleased to be able to enjoy your wonderful write.