Our love is

of love and dying love.

Our love is not a sandcastle

it is that sand

staring bravely, innocent against the bubbling ocean waves

knowing not how easily it can be wiped out

crumbling against each other between the bubbles and itself

a proud but fragile piece of the masterpiece

it is fragile

 

Our love is not a woven string

it is that string

firmly grasping each other to make a good weaving

knowing not the friction, the pain and restricting

that in deciding to bind strongly together

it killed and cut each other

it is ambitious

 

Our love is not a promise made in heaven

it is the making

in trying to make it one that is favored by the Gods

the lovers forgotten

that the heavens is not a destination arriving

it is the choice to make in everyday

the choice to stay together, believing

preserves the promise more than the heavens

it is overlooked

 

our love is. not.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it is ambitious...sometimes maybe overly so...

i see this more as a positive..our love is not overlooked, it is a choice and we work at it...

but then i am forever the optimist.

i was in three marriages where the other party didn't...one sided does not work.

well said here.

[EloisaWrites]

Thank you for the review, Jacob. I am also almost always positive. But then, most of the time when I get into poetry, most of the time, it is always the pain, the waiting, the what if's, and all the things our hearts would crave and and the things we regret that is easily written. :)

[TheLoneWriter]

I absolutely loved this. I love the metaphorical references that you made it was refreshing and I just can't pick out my favorite stanza. Another great piece! I love the messages in all of your poems! You're a great writer!

[EloisaWrites]

Wow. That was like so awesome to hear from you! Glad you liked my poems. :)

[Lydia Shutter]

How sad....the realization a love has died....that perhaps it never really was meant to be. Such an emotive write. Lydi**

[EloisaWrites]

Thank you very mush for the review. :)

[Sami Khalil]

This was wonderful...In my library...:).................

[EloisaWrites]

Thank you so much! :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)...............

[Sami Khalil]

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