In the Garden of Us

The poem "In the Garden of Us" symbolizes a deep and nurturing love between two people

In the Garden of Us

In the garden of us, where wildflowers bloom,

Time dances softly, casting away all gloom.

Each petal a whisper, each stem a sweet sigh,

As the sun kisses gently the canvas of sky.

Your laughter, a melody carried on the breeze,

A symphony woven through the rustling trees.

In the arms of the evening, as the stars take their place,

I find my reflection in your gentle embrace.

Our dreams intertwine like ivy on stone,

Roots deep in the earth, yet our spirits have flown.

With every heartbeat, a tapestry spun,

Two souls in the twilight, united as one.

The moon spills its silver, a promise anew,

Illuminating secrets only known to a few.

In the hush of the night, under celestial glow,

We carve our eternity, where wild rivers flow.

Oh, to love like this, where wild things run free,

To lose and to find in the depths of the sea.

With you, my dear heart, love's blossom unfolds,

In the garden of us, where true magic beholds.

So let’s wander forever, where time cannot tether,

With fingers entwined, in all kinds of weather.

For in this sweet union, beneath the stars’ trust,

I promise you always, in the garden of us.

Reviews

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

this is an incredible love poem. the sweetness of your emotions are transmitted through the page; reading this i can feel, a little bit, of how you feel right now. i see you in the distance, on a stage, basking in your light, and, in the shadows, an audience member, watching (perhaps with a bit of envy) the concert you sing.

[Elnnes Scholtz]

Thank you so much for your kind words, Ern. I'm touched that the emotions I tried to convey came through to you so clearly. Your imagery of the stage and the audience is beautiful—it's almost like you captured the dynamic between the poem and its reader perfectly. It's fascinating to think of my words as a performance, and your response feels like a powerful reflection of that connection. I'm so glad you could feel even a glimpse of what I was expressing. Your support and insight mean a lot to me!

warm regards,
Elnnes

[Amy R]

This poem revolves around love and connection, depicting an intimate relationship that flourishes in a metaphorical garden. It emphasizes the beauty of shared experiences and the intertwining of two souls as they navigate life together.❤❤

I LOVE THIS POEM, Exactly like my fav kinds. I see similarity to myself in your words, so I may visit very often to read your poems,. Great imagery and flow as well...

Thanks for sharing.
-Amy

[Sami Khalil]

A beautiful title and poem.
Very romantic and enchanting.

[Elnnes Scholtz]

Thank you, Sami. Appreciate your kind words and love for the poem. Have a blessed day!

[Sami Khalil]

You do the same. You are welcome.

[W. Barrett Munn]

You have a real gift for the use of rhyme, and your rhythms and meter are strong and musical.
The key, IMO, to rhyme is making it seem natural, almost accidental, and to find more slant rhymes that harder sounds. It isn't easy to do; combined with meter, it can be a real struggle.
I congratulate you on overcoming those obstacles in this fine musical piece.

[Elnnes Scholtz]

Thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback! I truly appreciate your insights on rhyme and meter, as I strive to make them feel as natural and seamless as possible. You're right, it can be quite a challenge to maintain flow without forcing harder sounds, so hearing that it came across as musical means a lot to me. Your encouragement inspires me to keep refining my craft and exploring new ways to blend rhyme and rhythm. Thank you again for your kind words!

[Shredded Cabbage]

Your words carry such a light zephyr of feeling throughout this poem. Seems to dance and fall slowly down the page as it descends. Love this couplet;-
The moon spills its silver, a promise anew,
Illuminating secrets only known to a few.
Always love moon imagery especially when it speaks of secrets and speaking to one alone. Lovely work!

[Elnnes Scholtz]

Thank you so much for your thoughtful review! I’m glad you felt the lightness and flow in the poem. The couplet you highlighted is one of my favorites, and I love how the moon can symbolize both beauty and mystery. Your appreciation for the imagery means a lot to me, and I'm thrilled that it resonated with you. Your feedback inspires me to keep exploring these themes!