Echoes of Tomorrow

The poem "Echoes of Tomorrow" explores the struggle of self-reflection and the cyclical nature of personal mistakes.

In the quiet dawn, I meet my own gaze,

A mirror of scars, shadows whisper my name.

Why do I wear my mistakes like a cloak,

As if failure’s embrace is a comforting game?

Each crack holds a story, a dance with despair,

Why do I circle the same weary path?

I laugh through the pain, pretending I care,

Yet inside, I’m drowning in my aftermath.

Oh, heart, can you fathom the battles unwon?

Each thud is a memory, a lesson ignored.

Why do I chase shadows, knowing I’ll run,

When the cost of my folly leaves me so sore?

What keeps me entangled in threads of my doubt?

A tapestry frayed with the weight of regret.

Each “I will change” a comforting shout,

Yet the promise of change leads to more upset.

Now here I stand, at the edge of the fall,

With the ground rushing up-"will I ever take flight?

What truth will emerge when I shatter, when I crawl?

Will the darkness unveil what I’ve hidden from sight?

This pain is my teacher, a fire in my chest,

Each bruise and each scar, a lesson to learn.

Can I rise from the ashes, reclaim what is best?

For only in falling do I truly return.

So let the past haunt me; can I learn to embrace

The ghosts of my failures, the weight of the night?

Will the echoes of yesterday carve out a new space

Where I stumble and grow, and reclaim my own fight?

Reviews

[Tom]

A poem that flows smoothly of the tongue through effective /pertinent end sentence word choice with each stanza that tells of the one's own personal battles with life and the failures that come along that journey punching and kicking the subject thus impinging to the wearysome payload, concluding with some positivity as one reconciles with self, gotta learn from our mistakes/setbacks and grow wiser with each new step!

( Ps .. Just a suggestion, 3rd stanza, last word 'sore' ... I insert discord instead, rhymes better with ' ignored' and ties in more appropriately with the whole stanza 's meaning I reckon, eg.. ' The cost of my folly
fills me with discord '

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[Nessa]

Thank you for your thoughtful feedback, Tom! I appreciate your insights on the poem's flow and message about personal battles. I love your suggestion for the third stanza! "Discord" does fit the theme well and enhances the rhyme. I’ll definitely consider making that change. Thanks for taking the time to share your thoughts!

Best,
Elnnes

[emmajoygreen]

'This pain is my teacher, a fire in my chest,
Each bruise and each scar, a lesson to learn.
Can I rise from the ashes, reclaim what is best?
For only in falling do I truly return.'

An example of how to create poetry with content that teaches 'how to' - yet, , uses very fine meter.
Start to finish your emotions speak out whilst the literary style walks at their side. Kudos, Elnnes Scholtz.

[Nessa]

Thank you so much, Emma! I’m glad you resonated with the poem and its themes of growth through pain. I appreciate your recognition of the meter and how the emotions intertwine with the literary style. Your support truly encourages me to keep exploring these ideas in my writing!

Warm regards,
Elnnes

[emmajoygreen]

Your poem rang bells.. is more than good poetry.

[Nessa]

Too sweet of you, thank you for your kind words:)

[Tumi]

wow such strong words, in just one poem,
you've captured every emotions very well with easy flow of rhymes and rhythm
we all have made errors and experience failure whether great or small,
the past doesnt determine the future its the present.
well written poem

[Nessa]

Thank you for your kind words, Tumi! I’m glad you felt the emotions and flow in the poem. It’s so true that our past doesn’t define us, and I appreciate your recognition of that theme. Your feedback means a lot to me!

Best,
Elnnes

[Dave W.]

I really like the line "Each crack holds a story, a dance with despair, why do I circle the same weary path?", I felt this, like returning to the same moment at a different time in life, repeating the same mistakes. Good poem.

[Nessa]

Thank you, Dave! I’m glad that line resonated with you. It captures the struggle of revisiting past moments and mistakes, and I appreciate your insight. Your support means a lot!

Best,
Elnnes

[Marie]

This poem is a very powerfully penned poem. It tells of personal battles with life and the events which occur on the journey. I myself don't believe in mistakes, for me they don't exist. Everything is an experience, without the experience we would never grow emotionally, physically, psychologically
or spiritually. There are those who believe in mistakes who say "Without making a mistake, you will never make anything!" I've heard it so many times down through the years.
It is through our experiences that we learn and through learning we grow and hopefully, with wisdom to help us along the way. Keep up the fight, dear poetess. Never give it up!
I love how the poem flows so effortlessly down the page, is excellently expressed and eloquently inked. I love the title of the poem. Hopefully, today will not echo tomorrow!!! I enjoyed reading very much and thank you for sharing...

[Nessa]

Thank you so much, Marie! I’m glad you found the poem powerful and that it resonated with your perspective on experiences. I completely agree—every experience shapes us and contributes to our growth. Your encouragement means a lot, and I appreciate your kind words about the flow and expression of the poem. Thank you for taking the time to read and share your thoughts!

Warm regards,
Elnnes

[Marie]

Most welcome always, Elnnes...
Thank you...