Mirror of You

This poem subtly turns his behavior back on him, making him realize the emptiness of his actions and that losing control of you is a blow to his ego, hopefully making him reflect on the loss.

You always needed to be seen,
The center of it all, the king, the queen,
You craved the praise, the endless glow,
But never cared how much I’d grow.

You broke me down to build you high,
Fed off my tears, my silent cry,
You turned my love into a game,
And made me carry all the blame.

You played the victim, played the part,
And slowly shattered every heart.
You laughed at pain you couldn’t feel,
But all your wounds, I had to heal.

You showed the world your perfect face,
But left me buried in disgrace.
I gave you all, but all you took,
While I just faded, overtook.

You flaunt your charm, your shallow pride,
But deep inside, there’s nothing wide.
You’ll never know what love can be,
Because you can’t look past your “me.”

One day, the mirror you adore
Will show the cracks you can’t ignore.
And when you’re left with only you,
You’ll wish you’d valued something true.

But I am gone, and now you’ll see,
You’ll never have control of me.
I’m done, I’ve broken from your chain,
Let that be your lasting pain.

Reviews

[crepusculite]

A very interesting read! Flows really well, especially with the very natural rhymes, and the last verse ties things up in a way that feels very final. Connects to lots of small topics relevant to the theme in a way that feels exploratory, but without getting lost in them.

[Nessa]

Thank you for your kind words! I’m glad to hear you found the poem interesting and that the flow resonated with you. I aimed for the last verse to create a sense of closure while exploring various themes, so your feedback means a lot. I appreciate you taking the time to read it!

Warm Regards to you

-Elnnes

[Marie]

A very poignant write , Elnnes. I am so happy and pleased to read that the chain of control has been broken and you are free! That is the most wonderful message for me within the poem. People are truly amazing and never cease to amaze me in the way they use the love which somebody has for them to enrich their life at the cost of another's. Sadly, they never can see past themselves as if the whole world revolves around them and you have captured this superbly through excellent word choice in this sublimely penned poem. Emotionally and psychologically intense, but how proud you can be of yourself to be strong enough not just to break the chains of control, but to say "I've had enough!" and leave and then to write about the experience so superbly. Classic write! Thank you for sharing, Elnnes. Kudo's on changing your life for the better too... Admiration and respect...

[Ellsworth]

This poem reveals strong emotional intensity and honest self-expression - I feel it! The consistent rhyme scheme and rhythm give it a lyrical quality. Occasionally, it feels forced, particularly in lines where the language serves the rhyme rather than enhancing meaning. Structurally, the poem’s stanzas follow a compelling narrative arc of betrayal and reclamation. If you are thinking of a version 2, consider adding some imagery or metaphor for depth and impact. Overall loved the emotion you conveyed

[Tumi]

You Always Needed to Be Seen poignantly explores the pain of a one-sided relationship, emphasizing manipulation and self-discovery. The shift from hurt to empowerment is compelling, culminating in a strong declaration of independence.

[Nessa]

Thank you for your insightful review of "Mirror of you". I appreciate your thoughts on the themes of manipulation and self-discovery, and I’m glad the shift to empowerment resonated with you. Your support inspires me to keep writing.
Warm Regards to you Tumi

-Elnnes