IGNORANCE

I See the Earth

IGNORANCE

 

Blackened land of devastations

You have fed us for  generations

Here I stand looking at you

No one there to see you through!

Ignorance ...........  once

Taking the chance

 

The rape and the pillaging

Money always  diminishing

We do not see your lustrous charm

All we seem to do is harm!

Ignorance .......... twice

Paying  the price

 

The spilling of your blood

Ripped out of your veins a flood

You give, we get, they take more

And all the while we wage war!

Ignorance.......... trice

Rolling the dice

 

Sweet Earth our home

This exquisite place we roam

Where birds a plenty once flew

Now absent from our view!

Ignorance......... again

Feeling the pain

 

Where your rivers of life

Are now barren with strife

Poisoned, choked a constant Armageddon

smeared with madman venom!

Ignorance........... indifference

Suffering  the consequence

 

With each and every breath

This living miraculous earth

I vow to  plant your seed

And to all humanity - be kind I plead!

Ignore no more

Revealing the savior

YOU

 

Author's Note

This is the first poem I have Attempted in a very long time. I have been inspired by the writers on this platform. I might be a bit rusty. :)

Reviews

[Robert Parlange]

Powerful. We humans are such an immature species. We've only been around a few hundred thousand years, yet we already have the ability to destroy ourselves and all life on earth. Such an accomplishment. I only hope we will eventually mature into adults before it's too late.

[Elmarie]

Well said................. Thanks for another review :)

[iamshadowine]

wonderfully written and composed! it was an amazing read! loved it! keep writing :D

[Einstein Noodle]

so bleak and an honest plea ... you have put this in your own unique form yet when i read it it kind of defies my sensing form ... actually that adds to the feeling of distress ... i would be more prone to getting up and changing the world but my time for that is past ..our rants in the 60's (in my opinion) did far more harm than good ... the good thing being the ending of the Viet Nam war through protest ..a powerful accomplishment ... i agree with KW ...and share a hope for future solutions that continue the starts we have made ... a balance achieved ... before any Armageddon :0
E.

[Elmarie]

Yes you are correct, this poem could flow better. Thank you for your honest review I appreciate it. One thing I need to say is that by every breath you still have in this world...... a smile is better than a scowl and small acts of kindness makes this world a better place. Did you serve in the Vietnam war? Thank you for stopping by. Blessings El

[Einstein Noodle]

yes ..i was in the Navy as the war was arriving at our quasi ending ... those wounds remain to this day in my opinion ... so many brave men and women suffered the war and suffered the home coming as well ... things are better these day tho ... and hopefully will get much better ... all we need is a President and Congress who will care enough to actually fire some of those incompetent big shots at the VAs across our great USA... ;) i agree with you 100% about the power of health we receive and give by a simple smile ..absolutely ..so right now our conversation has spread a smile across me face just for you :)))

[William Liston]

Thisis a very captivating poem. Your imagery was very powerful, especially the lines "The spilling of your blood/ ripped out of your veins a flood." Also, I admire your use of a refrain at the end of each stanza. Very well crafted.

[Elmarie]

Thank you William, I think this poem still needs work really but it gets the feeling across that I wanted to portray. Thank you for your kind words. Blessings El

[Anima Akuffo]

Wow. What a piece! Ignorance is so devastating - it swallows everything good in its path and you caught it so well in this writing. I love it and share the same sentiments. Good job Elmarie. Keep it up. xoxoxo

[Elmarie]

Aw thank you Anima I like you :) Thank you so much for taking the time to review my work. I am so honored. Blessings El

[andrew mitchell]

What can I say??? A power write to these times. Well done!

[Elmarie]

Thank you so much Andrew. Blessings El

[KWP]

I guess you can see it all right up close and personal living in Yass ... get's so dry down there.

Your words ring true and sooner or later - hopefully the next gen will be able to work in some kind of cohesive unity to fix this damn mess we are making!

[Elmarie]

Hi There fellow Ozzie I thought I had replied to this review. But I probably got distracted. I think this poem goes further for me than the boundaries of yass. In my mind I saw many places form around the globe. although you are spot on and this part of the world gets pretty scorched in summer. Winter on the other hand is like living in the English country side. :) Thanks for taking the time to read my work. :) El

[AYVID N]

I appreciate the poem very much. The repetition of "Ignorance" in each verse highlights the message in the verse. The blatant destruction of nature for wealth has begun to unleash its catastrophic effects. Thank you for sharing you heartache and angst on this burning issue.

[Elmarie]

Thank you Divya yes it is a burning issue. I can't wait till I have a moment to read more of your writing. Blessings El

[AYVID N]

You are welcome Elmarie...🌞

[AliciaB]

The language in this poem is very powerful. I like the repetition of "Ignorance", especially with the rhyme scheme - it gives the piece a relentless, dire tone, which goes very well with the theme. My favorite lines would have to be "The spilling of your blood / Ripped out of your veins a flood" - very unique, visceral, disturbing image. Nicely written overall. Great work!

[Elmarie]

Thank you for your review it's highly appreciated. Blessings El

[Nisreen]

Ignorance
we all pay the price for that one
and i guess this is what makes it awful .... I like your voice here
its very strong
And i like how you have this link to nature in your poem .....
As ignorance destroys all
even mother nature

Well done !!!

[Elmarie]

Thank you Nisreen. It's hard putting your writing out there. :)