The Imposter at Deaths Door

My nan she started forgetting

This disease it had no cure

Now so many years later

My nan is at Deaths Door

 

She wasn't my nan, not really

My nan she never swore

This lady is an imposter

The one that's at Deaths Door

 

She's got my nans face, this lady

The one I used to adore

but she's changed her completely

the imposter at Deaths Door

 

This disease has caused conflict

Her mind is now at war

She has forgotten everything

The lady at Deaths Door

 

Could she be my nan?

This disease has made me unsure

I guess I will never know

If its my nan that's at Deaths Door

Author's Note

I haven't posted in a while, nothing really came to me so I didn't just want to write a load of crap, so review, comment and everything!
thanks guys!

Reviews

[unsavable_soul]

Exceptional Oh, Hey,
Very nice ideas conveyed in this, If your goal was to leave your reader as lost in thought and feeling as the "I" in your piece must be; I say success is what you have a achieved. I lost my grandmother to cancer when I was younger, it started at her lungs and metastasis to her brain. She got more and more mentally young, then it was like really bad Alzheimer's and she passed. I wasn't sure what exactly had happened to the beautiful Woman who inspired me in art of any kind in the first place. I apologize I ramble on.

My point to all that was I found your piece personal for me and that it can only assume it was in some sense for you. Therefore I found this very crafty and emotional poetry. Please read request me in the future as I find it hard with things I have going on to get around to viewing new works of my news feed. Sorry for this, it seems to be often my loss.
Sincerely
Christopher

[oh,hey.]

I guess the emotion of the time reflected in the piece, thanks for reviewing!

[unsavable_soul]

If I failed in some sense what you were looking for in a review please let me know, I hope I conveyed my appreciation of this art.
Chris

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Nice poem. Imposter...impostor..whatever. I like the rhythm. :)

[oh,hey.]

thankyou

[Trigorin]

Not bad. Your word choice is maybe too simple, but I think it fits in with the tone fairly well and you've definitely painted a very vivid picture with this. The second stanza is the best.

[Amy Azra Dean]

An emotionally profound poem which opens up the eyes to the fragility of life :)

[oh,hey.]

thankyou:)

[lee von cleef]

tough thing, for you ,us, them, their inside emotion is the last to go, the present now is all they, you , we, I hold...

[oh,hey.]

thanks for reviewing :)

[Moniba]

You've wonderfully conveyed the feeling, the state of mind of the writer. This, by far is your best piece, at least out of the ones i've read. Loved reading it. Just a few suggestions though....
She wasn't my nan, not really
My nan never swore
This lady is an imposter
The one at Deaths Door

Note the changes. I hope you don't mind.

[oh,hey.]

thankyou

[Pink Witch]

I know you meant dementia. But this goes to many others who doesn't have any disease. Your choice of words are great :) I hope your nanny gets her peace.

[oh,hey.]

thankyou me too

[Marie]

People seem to turn into imposters, don't they? But it's the same person at the core.

[oh,hey.]

yes, but there minds get taken over so they don't the memories they got lost with the person

[quinfinn]

my father had the dementia in his last three years. it was difficult to watch a man who had been so sharp, so witty and so beautiful become a stranger with very little use of his faculties. when he did pass away it felt like a blessing. you have reached into part of my heart with this write.....very impressive take on Alzheimer's....well done.

[oh,hey.]

actually my great nan has dementia shes had it for around 10 years now and shes 97 and I guess its her time, thanks for reviewing

[quinfinn]

it is sad to watch....still, we love them. you're welcome.

[Hatchling]

I like it

[oh,hey.]

thankyou

[Hatchling]

You're welcome