Time

I thought of a moment,

Without any time,

If you put it in a box,

Locked,

And threw it away,

Where would all time go?

 

Would it follow a path?

Without any purpose,

Or would it try to escape,

The box,

Would it get out?

Or stay there forever,

 

Would forever, ever come,

How would we know?

If you took time away,

Gone,

Without any time,

What would life be like?

 

People deserve more time,

Time doesn’t deserve us,

Would we ever,

Die,

Life without time,

Would be the death of us.

Author's Note

I don't know if I like this or not...
opinions welcome!

Reviews

[Russell Munroe]

I like the Way

You Play

with

Temporal Clay...

Where would all time go?

It would do as it always has done: "...Slip into the Future."

[oh,hey.]

nice mini poem!

[Russell Munroe]

thanx

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

If there was no time, we wouldn't be running around worried if we were late. We wouldn't rush to get things done or look over people. Without time to hold us down we would get things done at a slower pace, which is sometimes better for thats when we see others needs and not be lost in the rush of time. That is how I see it anyway.

Good Job

[oh,hey.]

I like your views, but with time people are still overlooked as well.
Thankyou

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

haha thats what I am saying...with time people are overlooked more than if there wasn't any.

[Carnation]

Time. No one has ever and will ever clarify exactly how much time one has left to live, let alone how long the earth, the galaxy, or even the universe has to live.

[Peter H]

time is an artificial element made by man , we keep time to decide when we die.time makes us unhappy , but its also vital to our existence , i wonder how cave men kept time

[Peter H]

this is a good write i love philosophical poems like these that questions our customs and norms good write

[oh,hey.]

maybe by the sun + thankyou!

[Peter H]

yea could be animals can tell the difference between night and day to the basic sense but was that all they're capable of

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Sounds great. I love poems about time....just like mine entitled LOVE ME.
Good job!

[oh,hey.]

I will have to read it!

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Good read and write. I often wonder since I have no concept of time.

[oh,hey.]

thanks:)

[Ohhhwillow]

Time is a matter close to me, a matter I believe we all dwell on. Your title in this way, is ambitious - and you certainly have achieved much here! How the days throw us around, how the months differ, how the years present to us both hope and nostalgia.. This is great work!

[oh,hey.]

thankyou! everyone needs more time but given it we would abuse it

[Time's The Bond]

I like the concept it's worth thinking about, great write!

[oh,hey.]

thankyou!

[Marie]

Time is the way we structure everything. Timelessness is eternity, and human beings wre not meant to live with that on this earth.

[oh,hey.]

exactly!

[Trigorin]

Not bad. You have a good concept and you execute it fairly well here. Don't forget that you don't have to cap every line and I'd consider maybe easing back on the whole sort of 'questioning' aspect a little - it gets a tad stale after a while. Other than that, well done.