Time

I thought of a moment,

Without any time,

If you put it in a box,

Locked,

And threw it away,

Where would all time go?

 

Would it follow a path?

Without any purpose,

Or would it try to escape,

The box,

Would it get out?

Or stay there forever,

 

Would forever, ever come,

How would we know?

If you took time away,

Gone,

Without any time,

What would life be like?

 

People deserve more time,

Time doesn’t deserve us,

Would we ever,

Die,

Life without time,

Would be the death of us.

Author's Note

I don't know if I like this or not...
opinions welcome!

Reviews

[lee von cleef]

the instinct of now cry's, red yellow Blue...lights in a row, Oh Now is all I Know...

[Moniba]

Nice.... Different... But enjoyable. It seems as if you just let it flow. The words. Which ever way they wanted to be. However they seemed good to you. I liked it.

[oh,hey.]

thankyou

[Jayden Ireton]

I enjoy the piece as it makes me think. It reminds me that we do not always have time so we must work as if we die today. The crazy thing is we all think we have plenty of time. Great job.

[None]

"Time doesn't deserve us"

That line is really deep. I have never heard or read that anywhere before. Great stuff. WoW!!!

[oh,hey.]

thankyou

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I think it does work. Without time I think man has always had some sort of time, whether it be his stomach saying food or the sky turning night, it would be freeing to just do and not look at the hands on a circle.. great thinking piece !

[oh,hey.]

thankyou!

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[quinfinn]

i like the basis for this write. it is interesting, different and thought provoking. time is our greatest intangible and our deepest mystery. this is well written and very unique. nicely done!

[s y e]

Nice job, loved the flow and the imagery. A good write from you.

[oh,hey.]

thanks for reviewing

[Philip Costea]

Very existential toward the end. I enjoyed it.

[oh,hey.]

oh thankyou

[Hatchling]

Nicely done. I love the way it flows

[oh,hey.]

aw thanks