Can you make poems rhyme?

this poem is definitely...different

A poem without constancy,

 

Whatever will you do,

this poem may be strange and it might confuse you.

 

I will try something different, I shall,

Maybe so,

Lets try something different and see how it flows,

 

This poem will be mixed,

I have no clue why,

Just read it with joy,

And try not to cry.

 

Maybe you're a poet,

Can you make poems rhyme,

That doesn't matter,

Should they really,

Be in time?

 

What will people think,

Four lines and then five,

Rhyming then no rhyming,

Will they feel deprived?

They may feel cheated or scarred or more,

Thinking about this will make your brain sore.

 

Five and then six,

This poem may be mad,

It flows does it not,

But does that matter a lot?

It makes no sense to me,

Maybe to you,

Seriously though I don't have a clue.

 

I write what I wish,

I wish what I write,

Ideas usually come to me,

In the dead of night,

I may be a poet,

Or not I don't know,

My whole life ahead of me,lets see how it goes.

Author's Note

I quite like this, all my poems are quite structured so I tried something newww.
opinions welcome!

Reviews

[unsavable_soul]

This is sweeeet!
I enjoyed so much to read this. this is simple yes in wording but inspiring in message, flow, and execution from beginning to end. I want to compare you to a writer, and before anyone implies this to be insulting when I reference a children's author allow me to give my context.

In my childhood up to about the age of eight I never cared much for reading, writing, and most importantly poetry. then came a day in school we were taken into the library for a reading which was normal... however that which was read at least to me was not and never will be less then genius.

It was Shel Silverstien's " Where the side walk ends ". Simply put his original subjects of writing in the sense of what I saw as unconventional blew my mind and his flow to me was masterful. It was like the first time someone had said "hey, you... this is your soul" I dare say you share his gift to make that level of impact on people with works like this.

I mean to convey my absolute love of this piece, and your ability to stoke such great ideals and feelings in people as my inspiration did me. His writings some might describe as child's play but I say a poem about a girl who couldn't be found because her messy room enveloped her written with great flow and even moral of the story aspect being quite creative.

I hope none of this to be mistaken as anything less than heart felt admiration for the beauty of this piece.

[Rita L. Sev]

I liked this a lot - asking what makes a poem a poem is like asking what makes art art - more in the eye of the creator than the beholder, I think. Your piece has a whimsical element that kept me smiling throughout.

[dicey jones]

You know something about writing is the fact it has no rules, that's what makes it so freaking lovely...and i must say this was a splendorous version of writing. Enjoy it.

[Holly Mason]

I write with caution to the wind...
how it comes out is how I write it..even with a,pause
it is fun to try different styles of writing but it is also fun to break the rules...writing the only rules that haven't changed as our technology grows or even our language-up to date this is new lingo should not be held back it should be unleashed like a beast
thank you for sharing

[oh,hey.]

I found this style of writing quite fun! normally I prefer writing structured poems, thinking of writing more like this now, thanks for reviewing

[Ohhhwillow]

This is free from restrictions of formal language and verse structure - and in that, it is beautiful.

It holds a self-consciousness I admire, it knows what it is, a poem, of strength and of thought, of forward looking and nostalgia.

This is one of the most thoughtful and thrilling writes I've came across in a while.

I suggest you continue with this newly adapted style, it is unique and exiting! Very well done!!

[oh,hey.]

thannkyou!!

[RobbedByGreed]

Cute! Well done. I like the poem. It's very catchy and keeps you going.

Nothing boring here, I must say.

Well done.
Bravo!


---RbG

[Dr. Wood ?]

I think you did well
A poem can tell
a lot about one
and this one was fun

[oh,hey.]

hahaha thankyou!

[Jayden Ireton]

I enjoyed this work. It dealt with the issues of do this or do that. What is right what is wrong? You are a poet. Thank you for writing this.

[oh,hey.]

thankyou for taking the time to read it!

[KAOlmsted]

Ha! I'm not a huge fan of rhyming poetry, but don't mess around with structure ;-) This really did make my brain sore. Well done.

[oh,hey.]

I know you're not;)
and yes that was the intention;)

[KAOlmsted]

so...mission accomplished ;-) Cheers, love...

[Marie]

I like structured poetry, and free verse can be good to. But I don't like poetry that tries to be both.

[oh,hey.]

thankyou for reviewing, cant please everyone I suppose

[quinfinn]

this is a refreshing take on the manners and structured expectations people have of poetry. the truth is, poetry is whatever we make it. we can find it in every aspect of life, even in a baby's cry or the mutterings of a street corner hobo. so, i don't think the written word or how it is written has any patent and set parameters on what we view, individually, as poetic. it is in the eye and ear of the beholder. superb write!

[oh,hey.]

hahaa thankyou!