The man who stares at the stars

hey first piece of writing i have uploadeddd opinions please

A man and a woman,

fall in love for no reason,

but she’s taken,

never to be returned.

 

As she lay sifting,

she said slowing drifting,

that star,

that star will be me forever.

 

A man now heartbroken,

always awoken,

staring,

he stays staring at the stars.

 

A man just stays laying,

never decaying,

he’s the man,

the man who stares at the stars.

Author's Note

review this please
and tell me what you think

Reviews

[Holly Mason]

the title drew me right in
content flows nicely and is nicely penned
thank you for sharing this tale of a sad man staring at the stars

[Zap-the-awesome]

No, never mind me I just didnt get it at first.

[Zap-the-awesome]

It's an interesting piece, although it doesn't seem to have a lot of meaning..? Good work, nevertheless.

[Jem Sagcal]

The flow is so sweet, but the story behind it is painfully sad. Beautiful piece.

[Rebecca Dias]

nice poem! the title caught my attention! Really cute

[. - .]

I wonder why this doesn't have any reviews! D:
Its so cute, but sad at the same time...

[oh,hey.]

aw thankyou