Chapter Eight- Fight

I growled but nodded as I looked up at him, my eyes flashing a dark, dangerous shade of red.

“Fine… Let’s do this” I hissed as I moved, squaring up to the green dragon in front of me. I glanced to Alice for a split second, to make sure she was ok, and in that second, Talon lunged at me, our bodies colliding and sending a loud smashing noise to radiate through the island. Hissing I smashed against him more and managed to push him back as I lashed out, my claws scraping his shoulder and leaving a deep cut there. He hissed in pain before his claws met my chest and left scars. I growled in pain and blew fire at him, but he dodge out the way and shot fire back at me. I dodged but it still caught the side of me, making me whine in pain as the fire burned, but I knew the pain wasn’t as bad as it would have been if I was still in my human form.

We continued to fight, each receiving multiple cuts and burns all over us, but I refused to let him win, I would beat him even if it killed me, as long as Alice would be ok. But finally, it was over, Talon lay in a bleeding ball on the floor and I smiled triumphantly before flying back to where Alice was, during the fight we had managed to get pretty far away from her. As I flew, I couldn’t help but smile a little to myself.  I had won… I had finally managed to beat him.

Arriving at Alice I smiled in relief as I saw she was still there and that none of the other dragons had come to her, though as I got closer I saw a few more marks on her and growled. Landing and running to her, I clawed the ropes off her.

“Alice?” I asked worriedly as she dropped into my arms, her head lolled back and her eyes closed.

“Alice?” I asked again, more worried but she didn’t reply.

Reviews

[Created to Write]

Such a sad ending!

Try to describe the fight a little more. I'm sure most readers won't know what a dragon fight looks like. I suggest you add dialogue. Some taunting from Talon, a question like "Why couldn't you leave me alone?!" from Daken(I think that name is awesome by the way).

When Daken is running to Alice, have him change out of dragon form. Play that out a little too. Show how he feels, what he's thinking.

And the end:

Put "But she didn't relpy." in it's own sentence. It will add a final feel.
This you don't have to do, but if he roars in anguish when he realizes she's gone, that could add a touch of what he's feeling without the need to say, 'I feel. . .'

This book is going in my favorites! After changes and editing, you should totally publish this!